ladyluckrules

It's unbearably tacky, the language used is immature,
this would look better scrawled onto someones locker door.

The smooth rhyming technique he is failing to use is blundered over the head by crimes to any form of artistic writing such as:
"I’m too crazy for that bitch, you have spots just like a witch"
Wow, spots on a witch, don't you mean warts you little toad.

The end of the song veers on having something coherent and interesting to say. But all is lost again to the poor wording, cliches and swearing.
Tell him to start using an A B lyric format, a thesaurus and try to actually make some effort then perhaps then i won't lose brain cells by glancing at this song.

And that's what I think.

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