jibber

yeah, not too crazy about this song. The lyrics are really crass, no subtlety to them whatsoever. Bluntness can be a good thing in some cases, but I guess it's just a personal thing, because I tend not to like lyrics that are as "rough around the edges" as these are.

and like don't run me over said, how is it a parody? what is it mimicking and how has it altered the message or meaning from the original?

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What you've done becomes the judge of what you're going to do -- especially in other people's minds. When you're traveling, you are what you are right there and then. People don't have your past to hold against you. No yesterdays on the road.
William Least Heat Moon, Blue Highways

Your toughest competitor lives in your head. Some days his name is fear, or pain, or gravity. Stomp his ass.

HOOKED ON THE WHITE POWDER

either/or

maybe its like a humourous parody. like you know, listen to us send up this ridiculous song and mimick it in all its....glory.

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Painstaking devotion and love
Surrendered to self preservation
From others who care for themselves
A blindness that touches perfection
But hurts just like anything else

Isolation, isolation, isolation

DontRunMeOver

Steady on there, I don't want to cut myself on your razor sharp wit.

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either/or

i was gonna say something insulting to you but then iread jodi lee parker is influenced by incubus and changed my mind.

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Painstaking devotion and love
Surrendered to self preservation
From others who care for themselves
A blindness that touches perfection
But hurts just like anything else

Isolation, isolation, isolation

DontRunMeOver

Insult me anyway, damn you! Most bands like Incubus, so don't be nice because of that.

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either/or

i cant think of anything. but how can you back this song up? it really has nothing going for it.

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Painstaking devotion and love
Surrendered to self preservation
From others who care for themselves
A blindness that touches perfection
But hurts just like anything else

Isolation, isolation, isolation

DontRunMeOver

I like it. Had to add my own rhyme, nicking your ideas and some of your lines too. Its about eating a burger, people. Hehehe, double-entendre time...

I'm hungry for your touch
I can't wait another minute
Your warmth upon my lips
Upon my mouth, I want you in it

I bite into your flesh
And emit a pleasured sound
As my body gets warm
And I feel you going down...

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(In your lyrics, you could add lines along the lines of 'they say that its a phase/puppy fat, puppy love/but when when I'm not with you/I'm always bringing you up (geddit?)'.

Bad jokes in songs, works a treat.

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Crazy Luv

Thanks, & i like those lyrics of yours as well

I think i'll keep phase though. but the "when im not with you/I'm always bringing you up" is very good, i it.

Just those two words....hmph
& why it gotta be black ppl huh?!

sleepy jack

I'm sure hes refering to the "gansta" mtv hip-hop stereotype that you seem to enforce with these generic, typical, unoriginal etc, lyrics you constantly post. Its these annoying "Yo, Im a bling-bling king, check out my silver pistol gold coated bullets I use to it shoot at the servants of the man, who come too near my grill where I teach my hoe whos the man" or "Check out my humps let me shake my booty in your face" lyricism, thats a problem and its not bad he said black people, I mean cmon whats fifty cent, chingy, beyonce white?

I love how you single out that one statement and made it seem racist, when really it wasn't at all, he was pointing out a flaw in your writing.

Also its not that hard to type out "cause" instead of "cuz" Anyway, the song seems like the typical MTV hip-hop writing, same ole' metaphors. Also, your vocabulary is ordinary and overused, I see it everywhere. Don't like it, and I apologize if this statement came off as racist, im tired, sweaty and sore and need sleep.

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TrampInaTux

Well now it looks like we can't win the argument...