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Okay, I wrote this, and its in the making, so it's probably not really good, and this is more of an emo song (style, and mabye lyrics: YOU DON'T HAVE TO SING ABOUT DYING TO BE FRICKIN EMO), so just bear with me.
I saw you in my head I was lying in my bed the picture of your face brought me to this place During the verse theres like a -dun dun....dun dun- on the guitar, it switches pitch so it sounds better, but thats that. And inbetween all verses, theres sorta like a bridgeish sound, its a weird song, but thats the way it goes... The reasons I love you there arent just a few you are what keeps me alive and thats why I strive to get more of this drug a drug that I call love You are my cocaine and I need you all the same bridge sound Just the thought of you, It cuts me deep and through, wishing you were here, I would hold you close and near, oh so far away, I'll see you another day, but for the time being, I will remain dreaming bridge sound Do I talk to much, am I just enough am I what you need or should I take heed Am I in the dark, are you just leaving your mark, oh I love you so, I will never let you go bridge sound I hope this never ends, I love you more than just friends will you always love me, will you always hold me, I will always love you, I will always be true, you can count on me, to help you to be free Okay, so there ONE of my songs. Umm, if you want a meaning, basically, its about a guy, (me), who loves this girl with all his heart and always will. Him and the girl finally realize that they love eachother (I guess you could say) so they tell eachother. Their going out, and the guy just loves the girl so frickin much, he can't even describe, and he's not sure if she truly feels the same way. He knows that she loves him, but he wants her to be happy before he is. So yea, tell me what you think, and absolutely NO stealing of lyrics, not at all. |
This song is a 100% Cheese-fest.
How much more lame and cliche could it possibly be? EDIT: And how many more times are you going to tell us that you are an emo kid? |
well what did you want me to say? "**** THE WORLD AND EVERYONE IN IT, PEOPLE ARE LAME AND HAVE STUPID EXISTANCE, IF YOU ASK ME I SAY **** ALL YOU TOO, AND IN MY COMPLAINTS, I HATE ALL OF YOU".
I wrote about my feelings, thats all. Thanks for the criticizm though. |
So anyone ELSE is welcome to comment this. I know this song isn't that good, and I admit that, because I am NOT posting my best on here, thats for sure.
But Comments, criticizm, complaints, ups, and downs are welcome to everyone. |
It's good you have balls to post a song that you composed yourself knowing others might criticize it.
It's okay could be better, the drug = love part is a little lame. |
yeah and the rhyming makes my stomach hurt. the whole thing is just real lame. RE WRITE
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i like the 2nd, 3rd, & 4th stanzas..in the song. i dont see this being lame though.
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That's why I posted it guys, to get opinions and criticism, that helps me to frickin get better at writing, if I know where my bad areas are. Keep in mind that this is not my best and I wrote it in like ten minutes off the top of my head.
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Doesn't everyone say that 'I just wrote it in like, 10 minutes, I don't expect it to be my best'
If you actually want to help yourself, and your writing...post your best. Don't post this ****, and then us give it critisms. You should post your best work, and look at the critisms of those pieces. |
How about you shut the **** up and don't post where your obviously not wanted. I want criticism about the song, not some **** ass chick in here bein a dumb ass and bashin on me. Leave me alone and post somewhere where your ****ing wanted.
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