Isla Vista Girls (lyrics, widow)

Jadix · 03-10-2006, 07:53 PM

I like this forum so far, got some good feedback. Lets see how you like this one that I wrote earlier this week. Its about college town girls.

It was a cool friday night
And I was feeling alright
I was drinking keystone light
When I saw her dressed in white
So I went and said hello
You remind me of the snow
Your blue eyes have got me cold
And at night I sleep alone

She laughed, looked at me and said
You should get used to it then
Tonight you'll be there again
Then she left with her boyfriend
So I found my way back home
Took a rip of white widow
Layed my head on my pillow
Then I fell asleep alone

Then it was Saturday night
Asked my homie for a light
The weed makes me feel alright
While I'm drinking nasty ice
Then some girlie said hello
Told me that I had to know
She forgot her bud at home
And she wanted to get stoned

I laughed, and packed her a bowl
Didn't worry me at all
But before we got too far
She was passed out in the hall
So I found my way back home
Took a rip of white widow
Layed my head on my pillow
And I fell asleep alone.

sleepy jack · 03-10-2006, 07:57 PM

I like this one better then the last, I don't really have much to add. But its very good.

Mama Booze · 03-10-2006, 08:01 PM

It's clever, and it almost sneers at you. I like it very much. From what I read so far, you're a good writer.

Merkaba · 03-10-2006, 08:22 PM

Awesome man. I don't know what music you'd put with that to keep the good rhyming lyrics as key focus, but it's damn good.

Jadix · 03-10-2006, 09:51 PM

Wow, thanks.

Crazy Luv · 03-10-2006, 09:54 PM

i agree with what Crowquill said

03-10-2006, 07:53 PM	#1 (permalink)
Jadix infamous nimbus Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 140	Isla Vista Girls I like this forum so far, got some good feedback. Lets see how you like this one that I wrote earlier this week. Its about college town girls. It was a cool friday night And I was feeling alright I was drinking keystone light When I saw her dressed in white So I went and said hello You remind me of the snow Your blue eyes have got me cold And at night I sleep alone She laughed, looked at me and said You should get used to it then Tonight you'll be there again Then she left with her boyfriend So I found my way back home Took a rip of white widow Layed my head on my pillow Then I fell asleep alone Then it was Saturday night Asked my homie for a light The weed makes me feel alright While I'm drinking nasty ice Then some girlie said hello Told me that I had to know She forgot her bud at home And she wanted to get stoned I laughed, and packed her a bowl Didn't worry me at all But before we got too far She was passed out in the hall So I found my way back home Took a rip of white widow Layed my head on my pillow And I fell asleep alone.

03-10-2006, 08:22 PM	#4 (permalink)
Merkaba Whitewater! Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: New Zealand Posts: 2,885	Awesome man. I don't know what music you'd put with that to keep the good rhyming lyrics as key focus, but it's damn good. __________________ She thinks I'm a reclusive genius, she's going to be very disappointed when she finds out i'm a reclusive wanker

03-10-2006, 08:01 PM	#3 (permalink)
Mama Booze Here's lookin at you, kid Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: The White Hotel Posts: 366	It's clever, and it almost sneers at you. I like it very much. From what I read so far, you're a good writer.

03-10-2006, 09:51 PM	#5 (permalink)
Jadix infamous nimbus Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 140	Wow, thanks.

03-10-2006, 09:54 PM	#6 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	i agree with what Crowquill said