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Now, this may be QUITE controversial to a certain scottish woman I happen to love very much, but oh well.
father is crying paragraoh credited to LOZ from scotland. ------ Some people buy wine glasses just to put them next to greeting cards To remind ‘em of a memory That never really was. Ohh this could get messy Harsh words exchanged In perfume’s words, “it isn’t necessary” I’ve replaced my Scottish friend with my British friend that I don’t know so well in my top 8 at myspace dot com. Father is crying Because the barn is on fire Can you help me buy a new chimney sweep? I’m too poor to buy one. Let’s crash in heaven and make the lesbians angry. Then you can persuade me to go on to Freedom Of Speech. I’ve replaced my Scottish friend with my British friend that I don’t know so well in my top 8 at myspace dot com. [But it’s not really about that, love, now is it?] Copy cat! Copy cat! Copy cat! Eff, u, see, kay YOU! Ya ****in’ copy cat. I’ve replaced my Scottish friend with my British friend that I don’t know so well in my top 8 on myspace dot com. (Then we hear someone whisper) … But it’s not really about that, love, is it? ------------ EDIT: title is now "**** north vietnam" |
Its awful, I don't see how you can really improve it because the whole idea is stupid. "I’ve replaced my Scottish friend with my British friend that I don’t know so well in my top 8 on myspace dot com." that line just pisses me off, and the whole song comes off as a pathetic rant from some a preteen who spends way too much time on myspace. I don't like it at all, and thats my stance on it.
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Did you see the, "buts thats not really it, love, now is it?"
Its much more than what you think it is. |
you dont know what much more is... get over yourself
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Oh sure.
I don't know what much more is, sure. |
thank you. instead of saying something of substance, you just sent more crappy words outta your fingers... NOW i understand where you get your inspiration
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**** you.
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creepinson, see what you have started. Now she is going to go on a attention whoring rant about how she knows what more is because she has done this and this and that. Thanks man :) I think the song sucked. If you were trying to go for humor you killed it. |
Nono, I pmed him instead.
Arenchya proud? |
Of course not because you made it a point to say that. And I still say that you should just drop this song. It sucks, there is no hope for it. At least I know what ever I write isn't good and I write it to get thoughts down or just to make myself giggle. But you still find it a need to post it in a forum so people will talk about it and you can say that it has a deeper meaning than it does.
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So now you're going to work yourself up into a right fit and bitch about it for days till a whole thread is dedicated to your hate for him, in which you're going to as usual PM a certain mod who I wont name like shes your own personal attack dog. This is getting pathetic, no one likes the song at all. You're getting pist off over nothing. Grow up and get over yourself this happening to often.
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I can say it.
It's not my fault youre blind. |
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what?
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I have a myspace, you retard, did you read the song?
Pfft. Listen. If you're going to let your personal views of me get in the way of giving advice on the song, don't post in here. Just don't. It's not fair to me and it's not fair to the forum, for spamming purposes. It's just not arguable to say you don't like me and that this is clouding your judgement.I'm not saying you have to like it, that's fine. just be constructive. |
I think saying give up the song idea is constructive, writing about myspace is stupid and just a bad idea. I explained what it would make me think of the writer in my earlier post, quit treating it like everyone is out to flame you half the time you bring it on yourself.
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That wasn't directed at you...
Everything has potential to be great, though. I think. So there is some way to make it better if you think its ghastly. Like I said though. It's not about myspace. |
Then using myspace as the theme/metaphor is stupid.
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It's not a metaphor/theme.
It's just a line in a song about a friend that is scottish, and that's who the song is about, and yes, I happen to know her. |
you could make it better... but personally i dont think theres any point in trying
even if there is any deeper meaning, you seem more intent on trying to make it look deep than giving it a meaning... stop trying to defend it, and stop trying to make everything into something epic... its a crap song thats it |
Fine.
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yeah... gonna go with the general consensus and say that the song is awful. One, the myspace line, probably the most awkward sounding line i've ever read. It has no flow whatsoever. Plus just the fact that you've mentioned myspace in a song is pathetic. The entire song has no flow, no rythm, and no cohesive theme. You jump from one metaphor to another to another, so the entire thing is gibbersih. Plus, you talk about buying a chimney sweep, you do realize that a chimney sweep is a PERSON employed to sweep chimney's right? slavery was abolished a very long time ago, so once again, it's another entirely non-sensical line. The you go on to say that the title is now something about north vietnam. where the hell does vietnam come into the song? The whole thing is just a pathetic attempt to sound deep, but you can't decide on once cohesive theme so it's just plain horrible. so yeah, if you want to write about whatever the hell it is you were writing about, go ahead, but just change every single word in the song before you do.
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Oh the things I could tell you about north vietnam...
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oh, and get over yourself. |
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its very different i'll give it that. |
Now if ma_cherie says she likes it, it will be the usual circle jerk.
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OH! Go PM AITA about how I abused you. Or, if it will make you feel cooler & respected I'll refer to her as Rozi |
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The only parts i liked are bolded, the rest has to go cause it aint working. |
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The bolded parts, I actually liked The underlined parts, I really liked The bolded/underlined parts were actually really good. |
Okay so to advance on the entirely correct census of "I've seen some shit music in my life but this takes the cake", portrayed by the MB community, I'm going to ask something.
How the hell do you expect the use of random poetical one liner missfires to go hand in hand with "...top 8 at myspace dot com"? How? Because you can't pull off specific modern day terminology or lingo with farfetched half arsed poetry. The two don't mix. It's like water and fire. If your going to even attempt meaningful lines don't have random cheese spurting throughout the piece. Instrumental bands come up with better lyrics then this. |
i have thouroughly enjoyed reading this thread :)
mandas two cents of the day |
Scotland IS in Britain:confused:
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It is?
My scottish friend doesn't thinkso. |
Well Scottish friend must be one of those annoying scottish nationalists then
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I called her a scottish-brit once and she's like "no, thats wrong".
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Is your friend retarded? Just curious.
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I brought up the whole subject of that though, about Scotland being in Britain, she still said no..
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Well. Sounds like youre just saying that to cover your ass =)
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