There's No Need For Us To Be Alone (song)

angel18 · 03-04-2006, 06:56 AM

Tell me people what you think of this one. I need to know I'm any good at writing at all.

THERE'S NO NEED FOR US TO BE ALONE

I can't believe she said that
Can't believe it's true
Can't believe she's faithful,
She is wicked through and through
She's read too many books
She's had too many screws
Unfortunately I have fallen don't know what to do
When Spring turned to Summer, I swapped her for another
She drank herself stupid
Threw herself down the stairs
She put whiskey with her aspirin
My records in the dustbin
She pleaded me to take her back
I knew she would, I knew she would
Want without needing
Love without leaning
Hold without clinging
Don't suffocate, don't suffocate
She wore a coat too warm for summer
Socks too short for Winter
Shoes too scuffed for parties
And lipstick far too tarty
She wanted without needing
She loved without leaning
She held without clinging
But she suffocates, she suffocates
There's no need for us to be alone anymore
There's no need for us to be alone anymore
She wanted without needing
She loved without leaning
She held without clinging
She suffocates, she suffocates
She wanted without needing
She loved without leaning
She held without clinging
But she suffocates, she suffocates

DontRunMeOver · 03-04-2006, 08:30 AM

I think this is generally very good, although it'd be helpful if you visually seperated it into verse/chorus etc. for us. I would say though, that I'm not sure I understand the sentiment when the verse and chorus seem to contradict each other. Meaning:

In the later verses you seem to be saying that the girl is desperate, clingy and suffocating, whereas in the choruses you say that she doesn't lean, cling or need (but say that she suffocates again). This is a bit confusing.

angel18 · 03-04-2006, 12:26 PM

Im actually going to be honest and say i didnt write this. One of my friends wrote it along time ago. I really liked it so I took it from him. I think its good as it is to be honest. Ive tried to break it up into a chorus and verses but it doesnt sound the same! thanx for your opinion!

Mama Booze · 03-04-2006, 01:26 PM

You did tell him you took it, right?

angel18 · 03-05-2006, 10:45 AM

yeah of course I did!

Mama Booze · 03-05-2006, 01:22 PM

Oh ok good hahah

It's very good, a lot of unique lines in there, well done.
But yes, it should be broken down into parts...chorus, not chorus, etc...

~~Rabid Sea Turtles~~ · 03-05-2006, 01:28 PM

I liked this song.
Well done!...your friend did a good job.

angel18 · 03-06-2006, 03:23 AM

thanx for your comments on this song!

03-04-2006, 06:56 AM	#1 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	There's No Need For Us To Be Alone Tell me people what you think of this one. I need to know I'm any good at writing at all. THERE'S NO NEED FOR US TO BE ALONE I can't believe she said that Can't believe it's true Can't believe she's faithful, She is wicked through and through She's read too many books She's had too many screws Unfortunately I have fallen don't know what to do When Spring turned to Summer, I swapped her for another She drank herself stupid Threw herself down the stairs She put whiskey with her aspirin My records in the dustbin She pleaded me to take her back I knew she would, I knew she would Want without needing Love without leaning Hold without clinging Don't suffocate, don't suffocate She wore a coat too warm for summer Socks too short for Winter Shoes too scuffed for parties And lipstick far too tarty She wanted without needing She loved without leaning She held without clinging But she suffocates, she suffocates There's no need for us to be alone anymore There's no need for us to be alone anymore She wanted without needing She loved without leaning She held without clinging She suffocates, she suffocates She wanted without needing She loved without leaning She held without clinging But she suffocates, she suffocates

03-04-2006, 12:26 PM	#3 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	Im actually going to be honest and say i didnt write this. One of my friends wrote it along time ago. I really liked it so I took it from him. I think its good as it is to be honest. Ive tried to break it up into a chorus and verses but it doesnt sound the same! thanx for your opinion!

03-04-2006, 01:26 PM	#4 (permalink)
Mama Booze Here's lookin at you, kid Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: The White Hotel Posts: 366	You did tell him you took it, right?

03-05-2006, 10:45 AM	#5 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	yeah of course I did!

03-05-2006, 01:22 PM	#6 (permalink)
Mama Booze Here's lookin at you, kid Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: The White Hotel Posts: 366	Oh ok good hahah It's very good, a lot of unique lines in there, well done. But yes, it should be broken down into parts...chorus, not chorus, etc...

03-05-2006, 01:28 PM	#7 (permalink)
~~Rabid Sea Turtles~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: In the sea... Posts: 252	I liked this song. Well done!...your friend did a good job.

03-06-2006, 03:23 AM	#8 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	thanx for your comments on this song!