An age old tragedy (trance, offspring, member, review, quote)

TrampInaTux · 03-04-2006, 05:42 AM

The age old tale of tragedy...
From a great man comes a progedy
But the he doesn't live to see
what his creation will turn out to be
Under the circumstance
Everyone is displaced in a trance
tears of joy, they soon will pass
and sadness will prove to last

This is VERY short but I've had something along these lines going through my head for some time now. I don't really know what I think of it. On one hand it is very important to me and perhaps one of the most truthful songs I have made, but on the other hand I think the rhyming is a bit cheesy. I really need help with this one please.

03-04-2006, 05:42 AM	#1 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,412	An age old tragedy The age old tale of tragedy... From a great man comes a progedy But the he doesn't live to see what his creation will turn out to be Under the circumstance Everyone is displaced in a trance tears of joy, they soon will pass and sadness will prove to last This is VERY short but I've had something along these lines going through my head for some time now. I don't really know what I think of it. On one hand it is very important to me and perhaps one of the most truthful songs I have made, but on the other hand I think the rhyming is a bit cheesy. I really need help with this one please.