Caught up in a moment (lyrics, tune, quote, bands)

TrampInaTux · 02-26-2006, 09:12 AM

Forever she said maybe they didn't know/
but when the push comes to shove the quick turn to slow/
she held her husbands hand as he drifted off/
her world is now haunted by his splutters and coughs/

CHORUS
Caught up in a moment/
she's caught up in a moment/
caught up in a moment/
don't forget/

Stagnant souls drifting along the highway/
they can smell her tears since her mind turned grey/
"What will it take for another sleep?"/
she says, tuning into the voices of the weak/

CHORUS
Caught up in a moment/
she's caught up in a moment/
caught up in a moment/
don't forget/

She stares into the sun till it burns her eyes/
so bright, so bright it's advertised/
But she knows her world will change when the moon appears/
because with the dark also comes her fears/

CHORUS
Caught up in a moment/
she's caught up in a moment/
caught up in a moment/
don't forget/

explosions-in-my-pants · 02-26-2006, 10:12 AM

what type of sound woudl you go for if you ever put this song to voice, and instuments?

TrampInaTux · 02-26-2006, 10:15 AM

I don't know to be honest. I was thinking an eerie melody in the background of the verses, with a more upbeat tune for the chorus.

explosions-in-my-pants · 02-26-2006, 10:23 AM

ahh well.. that seems alright i suppose..
but i think you should do something more with the chorus dear.

TrampInaTux · 02-26-2006, 10:24 AM

I just want to see whether the lyrics are substantial first-what do you think of them?

explosions-in-my-pants · 02-26-2006, 10:32 AM

i like the lyrics, there alright. i can't get myself to focus on them to be honest, because i get to the chorus and it just draws in my attention.

ladyluckrules · 02-26-2006, 10:35 AM

I do like the verse.
I know it's tiring to hear such an obvious thing, but I think the chorus is a little too repetitive,
it just needs a small bit of variation or a twist to it.

explosions-in-my-pants · 02-26-2006, 10:37 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ladyluckrules

I do like the verse.
I know it's tiring to hear such an obvious thing, but I think the chorus is a little too repetitive,
it just needs a small bit of variation or a twist to it.

yea basically what i was saying. haha

TrampInaTux · 02-26-2006, 10:49 AM

The chorus' in my songs really aren't doing well at the moment. I used to be good at chorus' but bad at verses, now the tide has changed.

ladyluckrules · 02-26-2006, 10:50 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by hobojesus

The chorus' in my songs really aren't doing well at the moment. I used to be good at chorus' but bad at verses, now the tide has changed.

But that's good!
I think verses are a lot harder to change.

02-26-2006, 09:12 AM	#1 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	Caught up in a moment Forever she said maybe they didn't know/ but when the push comes to shove the quick turn to slow/ she held her husbands hand as he drifted off/ her world is now haunted by his splutters and coughs/ CHORUS Caught up in a moment/ she's caught up in a moment/ caught up in a moment/ don't forget/ Stagnant souls drifting along the highway/ they can smell her tears since her mind turned grey/ "What will it take for another sleep?"/ she says, tuning into the voices of the weak/ CHORUS Caught up in a moment/ she's caught up in a moment/ caught up in a moment/ don't forget/ She stares into the sun till it burns her eyes/ so bright, so bright it's advertised/ But she knows her world will change when the moon appears/ because with the dark also comes her fears/ CHORUS Caught up in a moment/ she's caught up in a moment/ caught up in a moment/ don't forget/

02-26-2006, 10:35 AM	#7 (permalink)
ladyluckrules D: Join Date: Mar 2005 Location: England Posts: 507	I do like the verse. I know it's tiring to hear such an obvious thing, but I think the chorus is a little too repetitive, it just needs a small bit of variation or a twist to it. __________________ AHOY SAILOR

02-26-2006, 10:12 AM	#2 (permalink)
explosions-in-my-pants angel of tragic days Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 924	what type of sound woudl you go for if you ever put this song to voice, and instuments?

02-26-2006, 10:15 AM	#3 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	I don't know to be honest. I was thinking an eerie melody in the background of the verses, with a more upbeat tune for the chorus.

02-26-2006, 10:23 AM	#4 (permalink)
explosions-in-my-pants angel of tragic days Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 924	ahh well.. that seems alright i suppose.. but i think you should do something more with the chorus dear.

02-26-2006, 10:24 AM	#5 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	I just want to see whether the lyrics are substantial first-what do you think of them?

02-26-2006, 10:32 AM	#6 (permalink)
explosions-in-my-pants angel of tragic days Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 924	i like the lyrics, there alright. i can't get myself to focus on them to be honest, because i get to the chorus and it just draws in my attention.

02-26-2006, 10:49 AM	#9 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	The chorus' in my songs really aren't doing well at the moment. I used to be good at chorus' but bad at verses, now the tide has changed.