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02-21-2006, 02:29 PM | #1 (permalink) |
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Your Silent Face
Your Silent Face
A thought that never changes Remains a stupid lie It's never been quite the same No hearing or breathing No movement, no colors Just silence Rise and fall of shame A search that shall remain We asked you what you'd seen You said you didn't care Sound formed in a vacuum May seem a waste of time It's always been just the same No hearing or breathing Just nothing The sign that leads the way The path we can not take You've caught me at a bad time So why don't you piss off |
03-13-2006, 10:14 AM | #2 (permalink) |
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i tend to dislike angry poetry because someone hurt them... it's like you turn into the hulk but you need dr. banner there to keep everything in check.... you have to make it much more conscious and deliberate effort and have something to say.... this is art not therapy.
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03-14-2006, 02:23 PM | #4 (permalink) |
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i mean this feels a bit raw like you just started writing this out because you were angry. there's no reason why you can't go back and put some actual work into it. how does a thought that never changes remain a stupid lie? i just don't understand lines like that. you know what u mean but u have to make sure the reader knows too
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03-15-2006, 08:20 AM | #5 (permalink) |
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i read ya stuff and i see ya replies ya got. just remember not everybody understands. but i do- i got cha message loud and clear. it's not out of anger- but to make a connection with an audience that can re-late. that's what writing is. the sun crashing guy did'nt get it- but keep at it- this ya boi slogan- i'm back ya heard me. Good job
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03-15-2006, 08:33 AM | #6 (permalink) |
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awsome break it down for us mr. slackjaw, you tell us what that poem is saying my brother in moonshine.
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03-15-2006, 12:44 PM | #9 (permalink) |
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its about someone thats really angry and just in case people think its not about me! this boy feels really pissed off at everything and he just wants everyone to go and piss off. thats the only way i can explain it really. its been a long time since i wrote it about 2 years so
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03-15-2006, 01:25 PM | #10 (permalink) | |
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I just want to know what this line means cause I really didn't get it:
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