beneath the storm (quote)

half_baked87 · 02-02-2006, 11:38 AM

so this is reconciliation,
for past wrongs by one once loved,
to drift apathetically
into the familiar, the reproduced.

does it seem uncanny, the resemblence
to where you've been before,
lest you forget the dissonence
of loving beneath the storm.

love couldn't fix it,
hope's crashed and burned,
faith's beyond you're inhibitions,
listless, fallen, blackened.

couldn't live without the abuse,
its become a comfort in unsure times
famliarity breeds sanity,
sanity's becoming a choking fume,
the clouds advance,
breathe deep, my sweet.

riseagainstrocks · 02-03-2006, 04:49 PM

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into the familiar, the reproduced.

does it seem uncanny, the resemblence
to where you've been before,

this is what I felt while reading this. Mediocre at best. I know you can do better dude, you have done better. This one feels forced. I did like the possible meanings of this line however :

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faith's beyond you're inhibitions

02-02-2006, 11:38 AM	#1 (permalink)
half_baked87 sammichestime Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Canada Posts: 380	beneath the storm so this is reconciliation, for past wrongs by one once loved, to drift apathetically into the familiar, the reproduced. does it seem uncanny, the resemblence to where you've been before, lest you forget the dissonence of loving beneath the storm. love couldn't fix it, hope's crashed and burned, faith's beyond you're inhibitions, listless, fallen, blackened. couldn't live without the abuse, its become a comfort in unsure times famliarity breeds sanity, sanity's becoming a choking fume, the clouds advance, breathe deep, my sweet.