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Acoustificable
This one's more a work in progress...
I've been here before A shattered jaw An elbow in the gut A well taken choice In quiet rejoice The verge of splitting up Feigning sorrow to the last But feel better on my own I've been here before Bloodied and raw From loyalties misplaced I have no delusions It was illusions And spectres that were chased This newfound cynic soul Feels better on my own Though your smiles shine like diamond Your heart is twice as hard You shattered my illusions Then stabbed me with the shards If you want to go, then go If you want to stay, please don't I'll fare better on my own I've been here before The clothes that you tore Hanging from my limbs This neck, red and sore Will suffer no more The teeth that you dug in The warmth of morning sun Feels better on my own |
I liked the other one better. This one seems clunkier. Could I have been wrong about you doing better?
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again, this depends on the format, whether it be song or spoken word, or simply poetry, but I rather prefer this one. I am a big fan of internal rhyming and here:
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but the italicised (sp?) could be re-arranged. |
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