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02-01-2006, 03:54 AM | #1 (permalink) |
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Lost In Space
We were trying to catch the stars/
On our way to Mars and we/ Could not find/ our piece of mind so we/ pulled the cord on our brains and our breath/ we floated into the sky and drifted to our death/ Now we see/ that they do not know/ what is happening/ in a world where we don't go.../ Now they see/ that they don't know/ what is happening/ in a world where they don't go/ woah/ woah/ woah/ ohhh/ They suddenly stop and the world gives up/ The searches end and the cases shut/ now who are we we're insignificant/ the world forgets we did something magnificent/ So they close their eyes and pretend we're gone/ But we're haunting them for as long/ as they live/ this is it we know it's the end/ so kiss a lover and say goodbye to a friend/ Now we see/ that they do not know/ what is happening/ in a world where we don't go.../ Now they see/ that they don't know/ what is happening/ in a world where they don't go/ woah/ woah/ woah/ ohhh/ I guess the world forgets/ We fall on broken nets/ Will they remember our faces/ Now we're Lost In Space... Gah-if only the Lost In Space film had just been released! We might have had a theme tune! |
02-01-2006, 11:59 AM | #2 (permalink) |
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Join Date: Jan 2006
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How about, "now we're lost in all the spaces"? I like that better. And title: Lost in all the Spaces.
The world giving up/forgetting could be a high ending, or maybe they're ghosts and got killed somehow? Who's world is this? Personally yours or a world we all have access to but don't often visit? I really recommend being less vague. You need to drop a few more hints. I think that's why I don't usually like your stuff, when I can't understand it. I like the first two lines but it fell apart for me after that.
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