And then suddenly
 

And then suddenly

I walk out onto the stage
Think i might die right here and now
I see your face within the crowd
And then suddenly there's no one around but you
I perform my heart out
And i do it just for you
Did you see me this time
Did you even notice

Chorus
(A love)
A love thats not suppose to be
(Is what)I have for you
(Was)Suppose to be
(Just sex)
But my feelings grew
Oh they grew far more for me

I walk off the stage
Go to my dressing room
Fiddle around with my stuff
And then suddenly im turned and pushed onto a table
You're there on top of me
Kissing and touching me
You give it all to me
I love and hate this at the same time

Chorus

The very next morning
I see you kissing the new girl
Why must i feel so hurt inside
And then suddenly the light bulb clicks on
Gonna make you envy another
Already found a guy, he's over in the lunch line
I walk over and do my best to work my magic
I shift cause i feel your eyes on me

Chorus

Im walking down the empty hall
To be pushed and held tight against the wall
Its you, who else would it be
And then suddenly your lips are on mine
They glide over my cheeks to my ear and whisper
What the hell do you think you're doing
You just got up and decided to go flirt with that guy
I own you, you're my property

Chorus

I cant believe the words that are slipping through those lips
This is a joke, you cant be for real
You're sucking on my bottom lip once again
And then suddenly it ended as fast as it started
You stare straight into my eyes, then turn to go
As you walk away, i slide down the wall
My distruction has come
And it came in the form of you

Chorus(2 times)





the words in the ()[in the chorus], mean that the words within them are said quickly right after or before

Oo I like it very much, it's very straightforward, but so is the thing you're trying to say so it works out.

Thank you Lex :)
is straightforward a bad thing?

sometimes it can be, but it's not here :]

no prob :]

At least i dont have writers block anymore

this was what i made at that time:
I got writers block
How about you?
Do you have writers block?
Cause i do

Even writing this
Gives me writers block
I ****ing hate you
Writers block

This is like a dark
Swirling pit
i cant seem to climb out of
this stupid sh**

Damn you writers block
For always being in tow
Got nothing left, Im drained
Or maybe im just going insane



then:
Seems to me
That writers block
Has come to visit again

Once again i am drained
Nothing else to write down
On this ****ing piece of paper

But i have all these ideas
Swarming through my head
I cant seem to write them down in words

I wanna scream, wanna shout
Wanna throw a fit
But no, im too mellow to do that ****

Oh ****! Look what i just made
It starts with a "P"
And ends with a oem

Yay! Writers block has moved on
Uhhhh...ummmm
Or maybe im wrong



:laughing:

yea...lol that's just bad...haha

I like the second one better though...but of course they're bad, i had writers block ;)

no the first one you posted a liked a lot, but the second one I hate with a passion just because it seems like a rant about something insignificant to the reader/listener.

i was talking about the second one of the two bad ones

there was two in there??

*goes check*

oh yea...well...thats the kind of straiht forward that's bad in songs :)

I don't know...I don't mean to sound mean, do I sound mean right now? I'm sorry if I do.

no no, they're just joke poem things...get it?

but enough about those

I really dislike the song. Really. Sorry, but I think it's awful. The chorus is awful, especially the (just sex) part. Terrible, corny and blah. (Blah is the only way to describe it.) I think any song that either you or madeinNY creates now is just a big kiss ass session, and it's getting annoying. I think that's why no one reviews, because of people like this. If I was you I'd wish for writers block, to prevent you from posting stuff like this.

How is the (Just sex) part really awful?

How is this a big kiss ass session?
I dont "kiss ass"

Because if one of you posts a song the other loves it and worships you for it, I pretty much agree with everything hobojesus said.

Thats not true. We give advice & we try to help to fix it if we dont like it totally, not just going to say "i ****ing hate your poem". I worship no ****ing one. What the hell are you talking about?! When i post poems/song-like-poems, im looking for advice from anyone, who will help me make it better. I dont control what people reply/post. Maybe some of the other people are doing that, but not me.

now that was low & uncalled for:finger:
But what else can i expect from you

Yes you're right you can't expect anything else from me. I tell it like it is and I'm not going to soften the blow at all, and I expect people would do the same for me. You have posted songs in here that have been good, and then songs that have been bad, the same with madeinNY. But it just seems that when either of you two post up a song the thread just turns into a big kiss ass session, with either of you two really putting any effort into criticising the others work. It just ends up in 'well done crazy, haha, I wish I could write like you.' Or something along those lines. This stands more for madeinNY than for you, because you are generally quite good at criticising songs and are posting a lot on this forum which is good. But I think it should annoy both you and madeinNY aswell as me and Crowquill, because if people just keep on saying your stuff is good when it's actually not, then what type of advice is that? Me saying that your stuff was weak is much better for you in the long run. You'll see.

Well that's just what I thought of her song. I wasn't kissing her ass or trying to.


Forum=diversity
Me=contributing to that.

Well you have said every one of her songs has been utterly fantastic.

Crazy Luvs ass=Bent over
You=Kissing it

No. I criticized a few, but some I just liked and didn't think anything had to be done with them.

But to be on topic...crazy, the (just sex) part did seem a little out of place...

I can't actually remember you ever criticising any... and if they were they were only minor.

And the just sex part was very corny. Not 'a little out of place'-corny.

See-that's how you criticise.

i dont want you to soften the blow, things would get boring if everyone was nice nice huggy huggy kissy kissy...yea. I dont want ppl to always say my stuff are good when i know it needs fixing though. Exactly why i put it on here. Cause i know theres some *******s(;) ) that will criticise. But i also want them to try to think of something that can help it or something. not trash it totally.

okay, so can you think of anything to replace the "just sex" part?

I don't think those bracketted parts are needed at all. Just cut them out.

I might just do that, thanks for the idea. in those "chorus-like" parts, i was just trying to explain how their "relationship" is just based on sex, no feelings attached & how she now has love-like feelings for him.

Well I don't really think stupid bracketted parts are the way to go with that. Maybe add another verse or something?