creepinson

criticism is saying its bad idiot... your thinking of constructive criticism, well im sorry, i cant bring myself to be involved with this song in any way

madeinNY

Well thank you for the critique :]

I am confused, when I wrote a metaphorical song, they told me to explain and be more upfront, now I write an upfront song, and now I'm being told to put metaphors in it...

Oh bother, well, I'll be working on it.

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jibber

who told you to be more upfront? most likely it's because they couldnt be bothered to read between the lines and gave up, so they automatically put it down to a problem with your writing. Try it again, post it up, and I'm sure you'll get a different response from a lot of people on this board. From what I've seen most of us appreciate subtlety over bluntness.

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creepinson

the key is to figure out your own style which goes well to the tone and theme/concept you wish your songs to have

and then you get bored of it and experiment... but thats another complaint for another day

madeinNY

I forget the user, and I've tried to find the thread (no luck)...but yea I'll try another song and post it, thanks jibber.

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bungalow

^If it was one of your songs, then it will probably be an easy thread to find. Look under all of the threads you created

madeinNY

yea but I think the songs dissapear after a while...there is auto-filtration on the section of this board.

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SittingBehindYou

I liked it. It had a really pretty sentence flow.

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sleepy jack

Dude, just stop crittin' her songs I have it either turns into some ghey dramatic arguement or her whining about it giving a bad review. Besides with her, read one of them read them all. Oh and follow crazy luv's advice.

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