God and Satan own a gift shop. (title, quote, songs)

Crazy Luv · 01-17-2006, 02:30 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by hobojesus

I'm creeping behind/
Like it's a crime/
It's about time/
You learnt a lesson/
We're here/
And we're ready to test them/
It's easy with your knowledge/
I feed off your soul/
Take it like your Brother/
and let her feel whole/

it was good until the last two lines

Quote:

CHORUS
Feel like I'm taking/
another stab of that shit/
What is it? What is it?/
Don't want no part of it
Feel like I'm drinking/
another sip of that shit/
What is it? What is it?/
Don't want no part of it/

Revolutionary/
The king of my time/
creeping up behind/
found out it's a crime/
I'll take your earnings with one foul swipe/
You don't come near because you know my type/
My bowler hat with the purple stripe/
The glisten from the glue signals your life/
I celebrate your fears/
like they on parade/
cos Death's round the corner/
and he's selling lemonade

CHORUS

nothing needs to be changed. this is my favorite part

Quote:

I feel its only not a matter/
that you can hear their feet patter/
before they come out/
like you knew about/
she wept when you left/
yet you showed no sorrow/
she wants you hear now/
but only if tomorrow/
will continue not a progression of past/
you rear your head but how long will it last/

CHORUS

i bolded that part because it sounded like you were talking about one thing then changing it into something else. what i mean, is thats the part that confused me.

but yea, i like this, needs to be fixed just a lil bit

TrampInaTux · 01-19-2006, 09:57 AM

The 'like you knew about' line meant that the guy had sex with this girl and had a feeling that there would be some repercussions. The 'she wept when you left' line meant that the guy had left once he knew that there was going to be some repurcussions, and the woman was upset when he did so. I thought those were quite a good couple of lines-I was mostly worried how the 'Death is around the corner selling lemonade' line would go down, because I think that can either be the most powerful line or the most hated. I'm glad it became the former. Thanks for the help.

Accipiter · 01-19-2006, 10:47 AM

The title seems a bit misleading, unless i'm not understanding the song, but I really do like it. Good job

TrampInaTux · 01-19-2006, 11:03 AM

The title was just something to get peoples attention. It just popped into my head.

01-19-2006, 10:47 AM	#3 (permalink)
Accipiter Music Addict Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: MN Posts: 85	The title seems a bit misleading, unless i'm not understanding the song, but I really do like it. Good job __________________ And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots! You see, Reverend Maynard, tomorrow is harvest day and to them it is the holocaust." This. Is. Necessary. This. Is. Necessary. Life. Feeds on life. Feeds on life. Feeds on life. Feeds on This. Is. Necessary.

01-19-2006, 09:57 AM	#2 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,412	The 'like you knew about' line meant that the guy had sex with this girl and had a feeling that there would be some repercussions. The 'she wept when you left' line meant that the guy had left once he knew that there was going to be some repurcussions, and the woman was upset when he did so. I thought those were quite a good couple of lines-I was mostly worried how the 'Death is around the corner selling lemonade' line would go down, because I think that can either be the most powerful line or the most hated. I'm glad it became the former. Thanks for the help.

01-19-2006, 11:03 AM	#4 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,412	The title was just something to get peoples attention. It just popped into my head.