Revealed (member)

Crazy Luv · 01-15-2006, 11:06 PM

The shades were lifted away from their vision
As the angels spilt the cup of unholiness
Clouds evaporated to reveal what was truly written in the sky
Time waned down at this unambiguous hour
Everyone left speechless and dumbstruck
No breath was heard nor movement of any kind
As each individual savored on
The taste of secrets fed to them

what do you think?
try to give reasons

Laces Out Dan! · 01-15-2006, 11:07 PM

Trash it........but its not HORRIBLE

Crazy Luv · 01-15-2006, 11:09 PM

if its not horrible, then why trash it?

Laces Out Dan! · 01-15-2006, 11:10 PM

Because its not good and i cant think of anything to build with it

Crazy Luv · 01-15-2006, 11:41 PM

^see it wasnt so hard to explain

either/or · 01-16-2006, 12:18 AM

yeah its not that great. it just doesnt really do that much or mean much at all.

Crazy Luv · 01-16-2006, 12:20 AM

meh....this is what happens when i have writers block

either/or · 01-16-2006, 12:21 AM

well yeah keep trying. at least it's not some cliche emotional bull. that i cant stand

Crazy Luv · 01-16-2006, 03:55 AM

*lol*

okay how about this...

Can you remember the day? I do
I remember the place. Do you?
Did you feel the rush as we stood face to face?

I remember your lips on mine, gentle as morning dew
But i cannot remember something...
Did you close your eyes too?

either/or · 01-16-2006, 03:56 AM

hey thats not bad

01-15-2006, 11:06 PM	#1 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	Revealed The shades were lifted away from their vision As the angels spilt the cup of unholiness Clouds evaporated to reveal what was truly written in the sky Time waned down at this unambiguous hour Everyone left speechless and dumbstruck No breath was heard nor movement of any kind As each individual savored on The taste of secrets fed to them what do you think? try to give reasons

01-15-2006, 11:07 PM	#2 (permalink)
Laces Out Dan! I love Puck Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: British Columbia Posts: 4,614	Trash it........but its not HORRIBLE __________________ We are entirely smooth, We admit to the truth, We are the best at what we do.

01-15-2006, 11:10 PM	#4 (permalink)
Laces Out Dan! I love Puck Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: British Columbia Posts: 4,614	Because its not good and i cant think of anything to build with it __________________ We are entirely smooth, We admit to the truth, We are the best at what we do.

01-16-2006, 12:18 AM	#6 (permalink)
either/or Don't think twice Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: A basement on the hill Posts: 352	yeah its not that great. it just doesnt really do that much or mean much at all. __________________ Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation

01-16-2006, 12:21 AM	#8 (permalink)
either/or Don't think twice Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: A basement on the hill Posts: 352	well yeah keep trying. at least it's not some cliche emotional bull. that i cant stand __________________ Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation

01-15-2006, 11:09 PM	#3 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	if its not horrible, then why trash it?

01-15-2006, 11:41 PM	#5 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	^see it wasnt so hard to explain

01-16-2006, 12:20 AM	#7 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	meh....this is what happens when i have writers block

01-16-2006, 03:55 AM	#9 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	lol okay how about this... Can you remember the day? I do I remember the place. Do you? Did you feel the rush as we stood face to face? I remember your lips on mine, gentle as morning dew But i cannot remember something... Did you close your eyes too?

01-16-2006, 03:56 AM	#10 (permalink)
either/or Don't think twice Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: A basement on the hill Posts: 352	hey thats not bad __________________ Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation