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Old 01-16-2006, 03:57 AM   #11 (permalink)
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hmmm, maybe the writers block is finally leaving me be....i dont know...
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Old 01-16-2006, 04:09 AM   #12 (permalink)
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Dont want to leave
I know i said i wouldnt
Please dont cry

Dont try to follow
Provoked me to push you
Get the hell away

We were great together
But im not sure if you actually want this
The need to think is overwhelming

Its not me its you
But i had to lie
I dont want the truth to unnecessarily cause you
the pain its causing me

My mind goes blink
you stand there expecting more from me
cant give you anymore
i have to get out of here

you storm out the door after me
you scream "dont you dare walk away from me!"
i ignore you and head to my car
just as im about to get in, you stop me by saying
"please dont leave" in a voice i cannot bear

i shut the door and slowly make my way back to you
i have to look in your eyes for a minute to tell if you're for real
Try to put aside the tears streaming down your face
You say "please, dont leave me", once again
What, just for the heck of it

Im about to say something i'd regret
but think better of it and ask a question of my own
"why shouldnt i?!"

you just stare at me for a second or two
you're about to say something but dont
finally you say
"because i love you"

im dumfounded for a minute or two
cant help but to have some doubts
i know you werent expecting the smile that graced my face
you see, ive been waiting for you to say that



ummm....yea...
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Old 01-16-2006, 04:11 AM   #13 (permalink)
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some of it is a bit typical. maybe question it a bit more, question his motives and why and all that. but then again hey i aint no great songwriter.
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Old 01-16-2006, 04:15 AM   #14 (permalink)
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no no, im taking all the reviews i can get. good ideas, im working on it.


how about this...

i have a secret place
Somewhere i can go
to just get away
from everything in tow
it helps me calm down
when im having a fit
or stops the tears from flowing
when things arent...blah


this is my lil sisters poem & shes asking for help, but i dont know what to tell her, any ideas?

orrrr this one...

Im walking home from work
Alone in these cold streets
Suddenly the streetlights turn off
And i hear footsteps lingering behind me
I turn around but no ones in sight
Must of been my imagination
continue on my way
An uncomfortable feeling comes upon me
Unknown arms grab hold of me in a firm grip
They pull me into the shadows never to be seen again

or maybe...

Must of been my imagination
continue on my way
An uncomfortable feeling comes upon me
An unknown creature jumps out of the shadows
After a fit of panic, i figure out its just my puppy


one more...

Remember when you said you'll always be in reach...
how am i to reach you now?

Remember when you said the limit for us is imperishable
as of now, that thought is convicted

I would be more understanding if it were an accident
but you knew the risks and took that chance

Did the thought of our future even cross your mind
when you went with your buddies to do your thing

When we were together you always had something smart to say
so what are you referring now?

Cant quite perceive what you're trying to tell me
you see...i cant hear through your casket



im just going to stop trying for tonight
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Old 01-16-2006, 05:05 AM   #15 (permalink)
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2nd one was rawking. KAPOW.
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Old 01-16-2006, 05:11 AM   #16 (permalink)
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yeah mugging and **** can happen is ny. but not in the sunny land of gold coast australia
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Old 01-16-2006, 10:42 PM   #17 (permalink)
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ahhh, aussie.
i wanna take a trip there. Is there any place in australia similar to NY, you know tall buildings, busy streets, nosiy, always something happening...etc. etc.


so im guessing rawking is a...good thing...???
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Old 01-16-2006, 11:55 PM   #18 (permalink)
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ahhh, aussie.
i wanna take a trip there. Is there any place in australia similar to NY, you know tall buildings, busy streets, nosiy, always something happening...etc. etc.


so im guessing rawking is a...good thing...???
oh my yes of course there are places like that. mainly sydney, melbourne, brisbane. melbourne is very clean. sydney and brisbane are dirty. there is also an amazing little place called nimbin were magic is sold on the streets.
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Old 01-17-2006, 03:05 PM   #19 (permalink)
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I really wanna visit melbourne & sydney! *sigh*....one day
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Old 01-19-2006, 10:59 AM   #20 (permalink)
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rawking is a good thing. It means 'rocking' but with a rocker dude accent. Like 'dude, that rawks.' =P
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