new song by ME (hands)

creepinson · 01-15-2006, 05:55 PM

Lived by every black line
In your book of irrelevant poems
Held it closer to your heart
Than every person
you left feeling alone
Still it refuses to stop the bullet for you

Do you still question, how the rest remain so redundant?
Or are you beginning to understand
The falseness of the light shone upon the blood on your hands
And that there’s no one there to watch you,
Once you have pushed away all those
Who would choose answer your prayers,
However silent you pain yourself to make them.
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not done yet... c4c

TrampInaTux · 01-16-2006, 05:29 AM

I like it. I like it a lot. I like the part where hyou say you held it closer to your heart than anyone else. That's a powerful line.

Crazy Luv · 01-16-2006, 07:46 PM

i like it too. i think the 2nd stanza better than the 1st though.

01-15-2006, 05:55 PM	#1 (permalink)
creepinson you are freakin out, man Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: ajax, ontario Posts: 129	new song by ME Lived by every black line In your book of irrelevant poems Held it closer to your heart Than every person you left feeling alone Still it refuses to stop the bullet for you Do you still question, how the rest remain so redundant? Or are you beginning to understand The falseness of the light shone upon the blood on your hands And that there’s no one there to watch you, Once you have pushed away all those Who would choose answer your prayers, However silent you pain yourself to make them. --------------------------------------------------------- not done yet... c4c

01-16-2006, 05:29 AM	#2 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	I like it. I like it a lot. I like the part where hyou say you held it closer to your heart than anyone else. That's a powerful line.

01-16-2006, 07:46 PM	#3 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	i like it too. i think the 2nd stanza better than the 1st though.