Cries and Whispers
 

hey this is a song i wrote a while ago. i want people to tell me if its good or not.


Cries and Whispers

Hope and desire are all we need
even when things are not what they seem
Hopes and fears are all we ever see
We made a contract in a field of snow

A single release now, and he's saying
Out of the woods and trees, across the rain
From out of the nighttime, somebody screams
He's on his way somewhere, like he's been nowhere
I don't know, nobody knows
I don’t know, nobody knows

Small girl is lost here on a frozen floor
what do they want with her?
What do they want with her?
I don't know, nobody knows
I don’t know, nobody knows
nobody even tries to find out what they want to know

Somewhere out there, is a man
He walks along a road in the purring rain
He wants to find out what they know
About his little girl
He wants to know, but nobody knows
He wants to know, but nobody knows

He thinks about when she was born
She was the most beautiful thing in the world
She had bright blue eyes and brown golden hair
He never wanted to leave at all
But then the call came and he had to go

Now he searches for his little girl
He wants to know how she’s grown up
He wants to meet and greet his little girl
Even though some things have changed
He wants to know, but nobody knows
He wants to know, but nobody knows

please tell me what u think!

This is another awful song by you that makes not an ounce of sense. Although I did like your mispelling of pouring (purring).

i think this needs serious work....i got confused, & i think you got confused when you were writing it or something.



It was good until the last line. you also possibliy(sp?) need to change one of the "hope(s)".

what is he saying?
...across the rain....???.....

is this the man you were talking about earlier?
how can rain pur? is this personification or something?

again, the starting..okay...the ending....what the ****?!....



is there more...or is this the ending?

at least it's not about taking a ****. still terrible