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01-12-2006, 08:59 AM | #1 (permalink) |
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Join Date: Jan 2006
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a song for you
out of the way or keep moving on
you might make a knight but you're still a pawn running in circles all the time you must get dizzy when waking down the line you say that the world is cold so take off your coat -- don't grow old smile for your warmth and learn to shine just turn off the light after nine CHORUS i know what you're going to say and i think that it's okay i know when you're feeling blue i can sing a song for you i know that your hair fell out your vision is blurred and you just stare about your heart might fail and it's hard to hear that's what you get for drinking everclear i know that it burns inside but that's just the price that you paid for your ride there's still no cure but ease your strife you can still lead a normal life CHORUS turn with the wheel that presses on spinning the world but still can't find the dawn running in circles all the time you must get dizzy when walking down the line CHORUS
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01-12-2006, 02:55 PM | #2 (permalink) | ||
a l'amou fou pou tout
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i like it, but can you explain this part to me...
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& this part... Quote:
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01-13-2006, 08:57 AM | #3 (permalink) | ||
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it's saying "don't grow old," not "grow up" Quote:
thanks for the thoughts
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01-14-2006, 05:06 AM | #4 (permalink) |
Don't think twice
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drinking is a curse my brothers. some lines could be changed though.
turn off the light after nine- kinda childish in a way, i dunno felt wierd.
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Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation |
01-15-2006, 01:12 AM | #5 (permalink) | ||
a l'amou fou pou tout
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i still think you need to reword... Quote:
& i know the song was meant for someone, not for yourself, but that particular part still sounds like you're comforting yourself...if its meant to comfort the other person, shouldnt it be something along the terms of... i know what you're going to say and i think that it's okay You know when you're feeling blue i can sing a song for you |
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