Levithan

Theres a few lol. Any critisims would be nice, i dont mind that, just no mindless slagging. Cheers

Fly:
I mumble to myself
Hoping your still around
I reach out in front of me
And all I touch is air

Your face in my memory
Is slowing drifting away

I wanna fly away tonight
Fly away so high
And leave this world behind


Call me:
Why does it feel like were drowing
Submerged and not moving
I push you away just so I can breathe
Call me selfish call me what you will
I wish there was a pill to
Cure the cold
Break the mold

Don't hate me for this
I hate you more than ever

I can feel you moving away
From me so very slowly
I hold on to you for the last time
Call me paranoid call me what you will
I wish there was a pill to
Cure the cold
Break the mold

Dont hate me for this
Dont be scared for me

Dont hate me for this
Dont run away so fast

I feel like im going to die
Weak numb and restless/relentless (not sure which one yet)
My feelings for you havnt changed no no
Call me deadly call me what you will
I wish there was a pill to
Cure the cold
Break the mold

Vanity and Self-loathing:
Delve the knife into your arm
to make sure you still feel,
How do you love yourself
when nothing about you's real?
Delve the knife to make sure you still bleed

Chorus:

Come try the new diet
Try and see yourself in a new light
Turn yourself into
The new Hollywood

(W.I.P)
Cant feel my legs anymore
Hoping I would just fall to the floor
You can see through my lies
When you look into my eye's
Do you really feel the same
Hurting you was never my aim
I touch the cold skin on your arm
Hoping never to see you harmed
when we kiss
You hope i'd miss
That look away
Hoping for a better day
You cant even look at me
While I sit and stare at you
I hope you remember my name
While I hide away with shame
I wish you wernt going away
I wish I could make you stay
I wish you loved me as much
As I now love you, and such,
This feeling bottled up like
A bottle of champagne
Ready to explode
My weakness exposed
The love flame, now hosed
Now I cant smile
And I wait, for a while
Hoping, Wishing, Praying
That you mouth moves with you saying
"I love you too"

The Longest Goodbye:
I never thought id be saying goodbye to you
Thought we were gonna make it through this
But as you look away
What is else to say

I cant sing and I cant dance And
I cant write you a heartfelt poem
But as you turn away
I hear you say

This is the longest goodbye
Ive ever had to say
And I die a little more
Everytime I think of you

I cant sing and I cant dance and
I cant drive you where you want to go
But as I turn away
I hear you say

This one doesnt have a title, ive just wrote it, literally like 30 seconds ago lol:
I need someone to tell me that
Everythings going to be fine
Coz i just dont know myself
And im real sorry that I cant be
the man you expected of me

And I dont know
If you dont say
What to do
To make things right

Now your excuses
Are running as thin as the
Ice were skating on
And hand in hand we'll drift away
Not saying a word



Well, i know their kinda emo, but you gota write how you feel eh

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Levithan

No-one likes them then eh lol

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holdfasthope

hmm, i like the last two the best. With the first one, i dont think it would fit well as a song at all.
Also, Poetry doesnt have to rhyme, i think your message(s) might have been cut short and opportunities might have been lost, due to you struggling to find an appropriate rhyme. Other than that, good job.

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