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MusicStudent4Life · 01-02-2006, 03:20 PM

Hi there everyone, I just registered and thought the best way to get to know some of you would be to post a song. Just as a little background I'm 17 and have been playing guitar for about 5 years and writing songs of all genres for as long as I can remember. For just about a year I've been on a songwriting forum of another site but I think it's time for me to get some new input so I thought I'd join you all. So have a look at my song and let me know what you think. All critiques are greatly appreciated.

[untitled]
today I said goodbye to your picture
in the afternoon I turned it into flames
today I let go of all my redundant questions
that were filling me with so much guilt and blame

(chorus)
my face traced with salty tears, I didn't care to hide
I let go of all the heartbreak, I've tried so long to deny
I rid myself of all the conflicts that've been dancing through my
young and confused mind
cuz in my memories, you'll always be alive
life's only a lie

today I wrote you a letter
sealed it with one last kiss, placed it on your grave
today I remembered all the crazy things we used to talk about
but in that moment my thoughts couldn't be explained

(chorus)
my face traced with salty tears, I didn't care to hide
I let go of all the heartbreak, I've tried so long to deny
I rid myself of all the conflicts that've been dancing through my
young and confused mind
cuz in my memories, you'll always be alive
life's only a lie

today I heard from your mother
she erased the last two years in a single day
when she gave to me your lines of poetry
that brought me back to what you used to say

when your face is traced with salty tears, you shouldn't care to hide
let go of all the heartbreak, you've tried so long to deny
rid yourself of all the conflicts that've been dancing through your
beautifully tortured mind
cuz in your memories, I'll always be alive
life's only a lie

That's it. This one was inspired because a friend of mine ODed and died. His mom sent me a Christmas card with a poem he had written and said she'd like me to turn it into a song. So the chorus is his poem and I wrote the verses around that.

EDGE · 01-02-2006, 03:25 PM

Well, let me start off with "welcome to MB" and you seem pretty cool.

I'm so sorry about your friend; I can't imagine what it would be like to have to go through something like that. However, I like the lyrics alot.

Laces Out Dan! · 01-02-2006, 03:44 PM

Welcome

padfoot · 01-02-2006, 03:57 PM

hey, im also new here i just became a user like 1o min. ago hehe well im 13 and ive played gutar for ... i think 2 or 3 years, oh yeah and i like your song it has nice lyrics.

TrampInaTux · 01-02-2006, 04:12 PM

Welcome to Musicbanter and sorry about your friend. Those are some good lyrics there, I can see you've put a lot of time into them.

MusicStudent4Life · 01-04-2006, 01:28 PM

To be honest I didn't spend too much time on these at all. I think the easiest way to write songs is just to be genuine so I just wrote about things that really happened, like me burning his picture and writing him a letter and leaving it on his grave. When I take a lot of time writing a song I end up getting self-conscious and then my writing starts to get contrived. I always write a whole song in one sitting and then edit as needed later.

This song isn't recorded yet, but I did a vocal demo of it for some friends of mine to hear and it really inspired them so their band Cold Suzy is working with me on this one. The recording should be done in about a week so I'll post a link to it once it is.

Thanks for all the welcomes, I hope to be sticking around a while.

01-02-2006, 03:20 PM	#1 (permalink)
MusicStudent4Life Groupie Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: cali Posts: 6	hi everyone Hi there everyone, I just registered and thought the best way to get to know some of you would be to post a song. Just as a little background I'm 17 and have been playing guitar for about 5 years and writing songs of all genres for as long as I can remember. For just about a year I've been on a songwriting forum of another site but I think it's time for me to get some new input so I thought I'd join you all. So have a look at my song and let me know what you think. All critiques are greatly appreciated. [untitled] today I said goodbye to your picture in the afternoon I turned it into flames today I let go of all my redundant questions that were filling me with so much guilt and blame (chorus) my face traced with salty tears, I didn't care to hide I let go of all the heartbreak, I've tried so long to deny I rid myself of all the conflicts that've been dancing through my young and confused mind cuz in my memories, you'll always be alive life's only a lie today I wrote you a letter sealed it with one last kiss, placed it on your grave today I remembered all the crazy things we used to talk about but in that moment my thoughts couldn't be explained (chorus) my face traced with salty tears, I didn't care to hide I let go of all the heartbreak, I've tried so long to deny I rid myself of all the conflicts that've been dancing through my young and confused mind cuz in my memories, you'll always be alive life's only a lie today I heard from your mother she erased the last two years in a single day when she gave to me your lines of poetry that brought me back to what you used to say when your face is traced with salty tears, you shouldn't care to hide let go of all the heartbreak, you've tried so long to deny rid yourself of all the conflicts that've been dancing through your beautifully tortured mind cuz in your memories, I'll always be alive life's only a lie That's it. This one was inspired because a friend of mine ODed and died. His mom sent me a Christmas card with a poem he had written and said she'd like me to turn it into a song. So the chorus is his poem and I wrote the verses around that.

01-02-2006, 03:44 PM	#3 (permalink)
Laces Out Dan! I love Puck Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: British Columbia Posts: 4,614	Welcome __________________ We are entirely smooth, We admit to the truth, We are the best at what we do.

01-04-2006, 01:28 PM	#6 (permalink)
MusicStudent4Life Groupie Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: cali Posts: 6	To be honest I didn't spend too much time on these at all. I think the easiest way to write songs is just to be genuine so I just wrote about things that really happened, like me burning his picture and writing him a letter and leaving it on his grave. When I take a lot of time writing a song I end up getting self-conscious and then my writing starts to get contrived. I always write a whole song in one sitting and then edit as needed later. This song isn't recorded yet, but I did a vocal demo of it for some friends of mine to hear and it really inspired them so their band Cold Suzy is working with me on this one. The recording should be done in about a week so I'll post a link to it once it is. Thanks for all the welcomes, I hope to be sticking around a while. __________________ a bird does not sing because it has answers, a bird sings because it has a song

01-02-2006, 03:25 PM	#2 (permalink)
EDGE accidental genius Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Boston, MA Posts: 1,161	Well, let me start off with "welcome to MB" and you seem pretty cool. I'm so sorry about your friend; I can't imagine what it would be like to have to go through something like that. However, I like the lyrics alot.

01-02-2006, 03:57 PM	#4 (permalink)
padfoot Groupie Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: mexico! Posts: 1	hey, im also new here i just became a user like 1o min. ago hehe well im 13 and ive played gutar for ... i think 2 or 3 years, oh yeah and i like your song it has nice lyrics.

01-02-2006, 04:12 PM	#5 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	Welcome to Musicbanter and sorry about your friend. Those are some good lyrics there, I can see you've put a lot of time into them.