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03-12-2007, 12:00 AM | #331 (permalink) |
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i figured you thought it had something to do with religion, and wrote it off immediately because of your beliefs. Tell me exactly what you don't like about it? I've proven that the objective is simple... is it just not your cup of tea?
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04-01-2007, 01:01 AM | #336 (permalink) |
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You
You I am ashamed. I will speak to you, But only from the comfort of darkness. Do not strain your eyes, To see my face. With this coarse voice, I will attempt to explain. I regard you with wonder, And better still with awe. You are a miracle. And I am undeserving. Please forgive me, Though I wouldn't do the same. My hypocrisy is crippling. I am a man who is whole. Without the sum of his conscience. I am a liar. And you exist as my only truth. My honesty in the form of, A breathtaking figure of grace. Yet I sit here... in a place devoid of light. To avoid your gaze. And when I emerge from these shadows with my torn face. I know you will be there with the healing touch. And I will weep in silence and without regard to time. From my hands onto your cheeks. My tears, succumbing to gravity. My love finally resting, A solemn corpse buried in you. R. Crowe |
04-05-2007, 05:22 PM | #340 (permalink) |
They call me Tundra Boy
Join Date: Sep 2005
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I like it, and all the more for the fact that the final line fits but at the same time doesn't sit comfortably. It has a kind of jarring effect that works well for this piece.
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