Crowe's Songwriting Collection

TrampInaTux · 09-06-2006, 05:50 AM

That's.... *feels camp*....beautiful.... seriously....woah... it touches on so many thing... at first I thought it was just going to be a really good song about young love, but you changed direction so brilliantly and I'm sure you will connect with every person who reads/hears that song, young and old.

Really well done.

I can't remember them all, but from memory this is the greatest lyric I've saw wrote on this here forum.

DontRunMeOver · 09-06-2006, 06:21 AM

That is definitely the best poem that's been on here (no offence to any other posters). In fact, its one of the best poems I've ever read. Its a bit embarassing to say, but I actually started crying when I read the last paragraph... and I have never, ever cried from watching a movie, listening to music or reading a poem before. Ever. You took my emo tears virginity, you bastard.

And I'm in an office, which makes it more embarassing.

Can't even bring myself to comment on individual lines, because I don't want to risk blubbing again. It was freaking me out!!

DontRunMeOver · 09-06-2006, 06:33 AM

Ok,

"And in my final
Days, and in my final moments - my life comes back,
To this single moment in this bed."

It was that line that killed me. Damn.

Alo · 09-06-2006, 06:55 AM

Wow! I really love the stuff you write. And I can't find one thing about it I don't like or can nag about!

Crowe · 09-06-2006, 11:30 AM

Oh wow. Thanks a lot you guys. this was inspired by my girlfriend one moment in bed... and while I don't think it will happen to her and I (God willing) - I just thought about how many divorces and whatnot happen and how most marriages start out with the most pure of intentions... I'm really glad you guys liked it.

sleepy jack · 09-06-2006, 02:09 PM

Holyycrap.

That was beautifulll Crowe.

Fenixpunk · 09-06-2006, 02:27 PM

brilliantly composed.

definetly strikes a nerve..like when they have to put ol' yeller to rest..

TrampInaTux · 09-07-2006, 12:40 PM

I want to be as good as you.

I want to be able to touch peoples emotions in songs without seeming oversensitive.

****, lets have a talent transplant.

Crowe · 09-08-2006, 02:34 AM

Hobo, just read your other song and I think that you have your own talents. You don't need to be "as good as me" - stick to being as good as you... as long as you put everything into your writing - no matter how old you are - or how intelligent you perceive yourself to be... then you are, in fact, just "as good" as me or anyone else.

As for being able to touch people's emotions... just think of a time when a certain emotion was evoked into you... happiness, sadness, etc... and what happened? If you were telling someone about it to their face... how would you tell it? The "oversensitive" lyrics come from people just trying to ****ing hard to tug those heartstrings... all you really need is honesty. Tell the story... paint it... don't go overboard, and you will be bringing smiles to peoples faces, or tears to their eyes, or anger to their throats...or pride to their chests. That's how you really get people's emotions.

either/or · 09-10-2006, 04:47 AM

that was insanely good. it built up like a huge emotional wave.

09-06-2006, 06:55 AM	#164 (permalink)
Alo Scarf Join Date: May 2006 Location: Brighton, UK Posts: 715	Wow! I really love the stuff you write. And I can't find one thing about it I don't like or can nag about! __________________ I rocked my shoelaces untied

09-06-2006, 11:30 AM	#165 (permalink)
Crowe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 699	Oh wow. Thanks a lot you guys. this was inspired by my girlfriend one moment in bed... and while I don't think it will happen to her and I (God willing) - I just thought about how many divorces and whatnot happen and how most marriages start out with the most pure of intentions... I'm really glad you guys liked it. __________________

09-06-2006, 02:27 PM	#167 (permalink)
Fenixpunk The Erroneous Hoodlum Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: West Side Phoenix Posts: 2,057	brilliantly composed. definetly strikes a nerve..like when they have to put ol' yeller to rest.. __________________ This message has been approved by Shawn Erroneous - The Declaimed

09-08-2006, 02:34 AM	#169 (permalink)
Crowe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 699	Hobo, just read your other song and I think that you have your own talents. You don't need to be "as good as me" - stick to being as good as you... as long as you put everything into your writing - no matter how old you are - or how intelligent you perceive yourself to be... then you are, in fact, just "as good" as me or anyone else. As for being able to touch people's emotions... just think of a time when a certain emotion was evoked into you... happiness, sadness, etc... and what happened? If you were telling someone about it to their face... how would you tell it? The "oversensitive" lyrics come from people just trying to ****ing hard to tug those heartstrings... all you really need is honesty. Tell the story... paint it... don't go overboard, and you will be bringing smiles to peoples faces, or tears to their eyes, or anger to their throats...or pride to their chests. That's how you really get people's emotions. __________________

09-10-2006, 04:47 AM	#170 (permalink)
either/or Don't think twice Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: A basement on the hill Posts: 352	that was insanely good. it built up like a huge emotional wave. __________________ Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation

09-06-2006, 05:50 AM	#161 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	That's.... feels camp....beautiful.... seriously....woah... it touches on so many thing... at first I thought it was just going to be a really good song about young love, but you changed direction so brilliantly and I'm sure you will connect with every person who reads/hears that song, young and old. Really well done. I can't remember them all, but from memory this is the greatest lyric I've saw wrote on this here forum.

09-07-2006, 12:40 PM	#168 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	I want to be as good as you. I want to be able to touch peoples emotions in songs without seeming oversensitive. ****, lets have a talent transplant.