Not In My Cards (rock, single, effect, quote, songs)

madeinNY · 12-27-2005, 06:19 PM

A/N: I know it seems like I wrote 3 songs today, but they were all written at different times and posted at one...so don't think I just wrote random crap down and posted it...also, only HELPFUL critisms will be accepted

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I've spent my days trying to make you laugh
Trying to make you like me for who I am
and not what you want or wish me to be
and all I have to say
after what you've done
is...
You think you're great
You think you're fabulous
You think you know what's what.
The truth, mah daheer, is
I'm Done
I'm Done
I'm Done.
Done trying to make you laugh.
Done trying to please you.
To make you like me.
You shouldn't have to make friends like you.
With friends like you, mah daheer, enemies aren't neccasary.

So I'm Done. (I'm Done, I'm Done.)
**** Off (**** Off)
I'm Me (I'm Me)
Deal with it.

Spending all your time trying to bend me
But baby, I'm clad iron.
So try all you must.
But I'm not meant to falter to you.
It's not in my cards.

**** Off ma daheer.

Crazy Luv · 12-27-2005, 06:36 PM

this song is a rush of emotion. Music(beat) seems like it would be the strongest part in the song.

favorite parts...

Quote:

With friends like you, mah daheer, enemies aren't neccasary.

Quote:

So I'm Done. (I'm Done, I'm Done.)
**** Off (**** Off)

madeinNY · 12-27-2005, 06:37 PM

Yea, this song will depend on beat...I don't know if that's good or not, but oh well.

It's written about my "friend" Lacee who thinks I'm weird because of my orientation...and I was really pissed at her when I wrote this, that's why you're getting that rush effect.

Crazy Luv · 12-27-2005, 06:38 PM

its not a bad thing for the beat thing. Sometimes you can "feel" the emotion in it all.

madeinNY · 12-27-2005, 06:39 PM

Yea...but sometimes when a song depends on a beat, it takes away from the impact of a song.

I hope it goes your way though lol.

either/or · 12-27-2005, 06:59 PM

soft rock again?

madeinNY · 12-27-2005, 07:10 PM

yes. how'd you know? lol

either/or · 12-27-2005, 11:29 PM

heard? read. web zeppelin you seem to going around making alot of perverse comments in all these song writing forums. and have you seen better or are you just saying that to say something, seeing as most of the posts you've made in every single songwriting thread seem to be just there to....boost post count or draw attention.

TrampInaTux · 12-28-2005, 06:37 AM

webzeppelin, you're about as funny as Syphillis.

12-27-2005, 06:19 PM	#1 (permalink)
madeinNY [[la de da diddy da]] Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: NY...duh. Posts: 444	Not In My Cards A/N: I know it seems like I wrote 3 songs today, but they were all written at different times and posted at one...so don't think I just wrote random crap down and posted it...also, only HELPFUL critisms will be accepted --- I've spent my days trying to make you laugh Trying to make you like me for who I am and not what you want or wish me to be and all I have to say after what you've done is... You think you're great You think you're fabulous You think you know what's what. The truth, mah daheer, is I'm Done I'm Done I'm Done. Done trying to make you laugh. Done trying to please you. To make you like me. You shouldn't have to make friends like you. With friends like you, mah daheer, enemies aren't neccasary. So I'm Done. (I'm Done, I'm Done.) ** Off ( Off) I'm Me (I'm Me) Deal with it. Spending all your time trying to bend me But baby, I'm clad iron. So try all you must. But I'm not meant to falter to you. It's not in my cards. ** Off ma daheer. __________________ I cleared out my PM box...I promise. lol

12-27-2005, 06:37 PM	#3 (permalink)
madeinNY [[la de da diddy da]] Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: NY...duh. Posts: 444	Yea, this song will depend on beat...I don't know if that's good or not, but oh well. It's written about my "friend" Lacee who thinks I'm weird because of my orientation...and I was really pissed at her when I wrote this, that's why you're getting that rush effect. __________________ I cleared out my PM box...I promise. lol

12-27-2005, 06:39 PM	#5 (permalink)
madeinNY [[la de da diddy da]] Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: NY...duh. Posts: 444	Yea...but sometimes when a song depends on a beat, it takes away from the impact of a song. I hope it goes your way though lol. __________________ I cleared out my PM box...I promise. lol

12-27-2005, 06:59 PM	#6 (permalink)
either/or Don't think twice Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: A basement on the hill Posts: 352	soft rock again? __________________ Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation

12-27-2005, 07:10 PM	#7 (permalink)
madeinNY [[la de da diddy da]] Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: NY...duh. Posts: 444	yes. how'd you know? lol __________________ I cleared out my PM box...I promise. lol

12-27-2005, 06:38 PM	#4 (permalink)
Crazy Luv a l'amou fou pou tout Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: NY Posts: 355	its not a bad thing for the beat thing. Sometimes you can "feel" the emotion in it all.

12-27-2005, 11:29 PM	#8 (permalink)
either/or Don't think twice Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: A basement on the hill Posts: 352	heard? read. web zeppelin you seem to going around making alot of perverse comments in all these song writing forums. and have you seen better or are you just saying that to say something, seeing as most of the posts you've made in every single songwriting thread seem to be just there to....boost post count or draw attention. __________________ Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation

12-28-2005, 06:37 AM	#9 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	webzeppelin, you're about as funny as Syphillis.