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12-27-2005, 03:34 PM
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a l'amou fou pou tout
Join Date: Dec 2005
Location: NY
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my poems
Happy Holidays
I give to you one white dove For i have the other I give you this So you will always know that you are loved Even if we part For as long as we both have each in our heart Then we will truly never be apart I gave my prayer for you to this dove Who embraces this message And will whisper it to the heavens And to the Angels above Happy Holidays Cant seem to figure out Cant seem to figure out If we're still friends anymore Things seem to be changing And not for the better more We thought we would be BFF But i dont know if thats still true I guess we'll have to go with the flow And see if we carry on through I dont really know if i can even trust you Realization Im drowning Without your touch Call me crazy Crazy in love You people gotta understand Im lonely without my man Come back to me Forgive & Forget boo If i could go back in time, i would But i cant Dont let this end this way I had a lot of time to think of How insane i was Cant believe the foolish things I, myself, committed Thats over and done with hun A new me, fresh start Oh! How funny life is Untitled What did i do to you To make you walk away What did i say To make you act this way I'm on the edge of letting you go Don't dare to think i won't do so I don't need you to live Realization & Untitled are not about me, just to get that clear. |
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12-27-2005, 03:48 PM
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[[la de da diddy da]]
Join Date: Nov 2005
Location: NY...duh.
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hobo be nice.
They are cliche...but they're kinda real I guess. It's how you feel. And there's nothing wrong with that...but to me, my favorite part of a poem is trying to decipher what it means...what your stuff does is just straight up...maybe you should work on that a little 
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12-27-2005, 05:58 PM
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Don't think twice
Join Date: Dec 2005
Location: A basement on the hill
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umm yeah and BFF? dont use things like that in a poem. and also use full words. like 'know' instead of 'kno' its not a msn conversation man, its a piece of artwork.
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Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation |
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12-27-2005, 06:03 PM
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a l'amou fou pou tout
Join Date: Dec 2005
Location: NY
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i gave the "dove" to my sister just to set it straight. Plus im still with my boyfriend, never lost him. Realization & Untitled are not about me |
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12-27-2005, 06:03 PM
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butt say x
Join Date: Nov 2005
Location: so i read the question as "Where YOU live" which was kinda funny instead of "Where you live"
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Nicely said either/or, I think they are okay. Did you get the white dove thing from one of the Home Alone movies?
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12-27-2005, 06:10 PM
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Don't think twice
Join Date: Dec 2005
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fair enough crazy wild lover. just checking.
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