Heavens on the fourth floor Im on the fith (Slipknot, cover)

TheNumber12LooksLikeMe · 12-25-2005, 07:34 PM

For every broken heart in this room
Ill sing an extra note
we could believe if we wanted
she said "It's our mistakes that perfect our dramas"
Love once was a four letter word
now its a paragraph telling me
how wrong everything has gotten
(chorus)And were going nowhere
but its just enough
for me to never feel this way again(/chorus)
Sometimes it feels like you never cared at all
time and time again it feels
like were failing again
passing days
slip away
from these hands that
would build you worlds
(chorus)
and the morning dove sings
in a key weve never heard
if Im lucky Ill never fall in love again

Rough Draft
thought Id try something new
and stick with simplcity
feedback?

TrampInaTux · 12-26-2005, 10:36 AM

good. When writing a song like that you can verge on the cheesy, but you have avoided it. Well done.

TheNumber12LooksLikeMe · 12-26-2005, 10:40 AM

thanks man.

riseagainstrocks · 12-26-2005, 11:12 AM

The chorus feels dialed in. But other than that, it's really good.

TheNumber12LooksLikeMe · 12-26-2005, 04:40 PM

yeah I guess the chorus was forced.

either/or · 12-27-2005, 04:13 AM

sing it real soft and make people cry

TrampInaTux · 12-27-2005, 05:52 AM

Considering in another post Number 12 said that he was good at shouting, I doubt he will be singing this song softly. It would be like Slipknot covering James Blunt...

either/or · 12-27-2005, 06:02 AM

hahah that would be fun

TrampInaTux · 12-27-2005, 06:59 AM

Can you imagine it? You're beautiful BUT I WANT TO KILL YOU THEN SMELL YOUR BLOOD

Sneer · 12-27-2005, 11:43 AM

i give it the thumbs up. heartfelt without being cheesy. nice.

12-25-2005, 07:34 PM	#1 (permalink)
TheNumber12LooksLikeMe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 56	Heavens on the fourth floor Im on the fith For every broken heart in this room Ill sing an extra note we could believe if we wanted she said "It's our mistakes that perfect our dramas" Love once was a four letter word now its a paragraph telling me how wrong everything has gotten (chorus)And were going nowhere but its just enough for me to never feel this way again(/chorus) Sometimes it feels like you never cared at all time and time again it feels like were failing again passing days slip away from these hands that would build you worlds (chorus) and the morning dove sings in a key weve never heard if Im lucky Ill never fall in love again Rough Draft thought Id try something new and stick with simplcity feedback?

12-26-2005, 10:40 AM	#3 (permalink)
TheNumber12LooksLikeMe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 56	thanks man. __________________ My heart is on strings and wires

12-26-2005, 11:12 AM	#4 (permalink)
riseagainstrocks Music Addict Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: DC Posts: 3,320	The chorus feels dialed in. But other than that, it's really good. __________________ One note timeless, came out of nowhere...

12-26-2005, 04:40 PM	#5 (permalink)
TheNumber12LooksLikeMe Music Addict Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 56	yeah I guess the chorus was forced. __________________ My heart is on strings and wires

12-27-2005, 04:13 AM	#6 (permalink)
either/or Don't think twice Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: A basement on the hill Posts: 352	sing it real soft and make people cry __________________ Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation

12-26-2005, 10:36 AM	#2 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	good. When writing a song like that you can verge on the cheesy, but you have avoided it. Well done.

12-27-2005, 05:52 AM	#7 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	Considering in another post Number 12 said that he was good at shouting, I doubt he will be singing this song softly. It would be like Slipknot covering James Blunt...

12-27-2005, 06:02 AM	#8 (permalink)
either/or Don't think twice Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: A basement on the hill Posts: 352	hahah that would be fun __________________ Painstaking devotion and love Surrendered to self preservation From others who care for themselves A blindness that touches perfection But hurts just like anything else Isolation, isolation, isolation

12-27-2005, 06:59 AM	#9 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	Can you imagine it? You're beautiful BUT I WANT TO KILL YOU THEN SMELL YOUR BLOOD

12-27-2005, 11:43 AM	#10 (permalink)
Sneer Let it drip Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 5,430	i give it the thumbs up. heartfelt without being cheesy. nice. __________________ LastFM Sneer's Emporium of Sound Fright Team radio show