Imagine my existense
 

Trying to clutch the desire that melts away/
grasping for my thoughts when everything else fades away/
and everyone/
they at some point know this song/
what they feel/
is an expression of self/
feeling and thinking/
is not good for your health/

When you look to God just to feel wanted/
when you think of the bad just to feel haunted/
and sometimes we sleep/
with the music and the light on/
we are scared/
in the dark of what might come/
we are fully grown/
yet we are scared of what is not known/

Darkness cloaks where the light used to shine/
that star in the sky that used to be mine/
my wishing star/
holds my mind like my body cannot/
a pensieve/
in which my dreams I slot/
we are lost inside/
my imagination say its time/
and we will go....

quite existenstial. a pensieve? nice

I'm sitting here trying to figure this out-do you like my song?

They said nice,
so I think so, yes.

I thought he meant nice about the pensieve line-that was all. Anyway now you've replied do you like the song?

Aaah i've been snatched in!

grasping for my thoughts when everything else fades away/
^I think that line could be shortened slightly to keep the flow

feeling and thinking/
is not good for your health/
I like this for some reason.

But anyway all in all, i think it's pretty damn reasonable when i see it written down and a good effort.

why thankyou :)

the song is okay. i just particularly liked the pensieve thing. mainly cause it reminded me of harry potter

God lame, i hate songs like this, songs that try so hard to be emotional and just end up cheesy.

This song isn't trying to be emotional-in fact it doesn't make sense. I know it doesn't make sense, I don't understand it myself. I made it to be that way. I just wanted to point out how fickle the people are on these forums. I have created some songs that weren't very good, but at least they had a meaning. This song doesn't mean anything. I created it for that reason. I wanted to point out that people will say they like a song if it SOUNDS deep and meaningful. This song is less meaningful than any other of the songs I have posted in this forum. Read it again and you try to make sense of it. If you can then you clearly know more about it than I do, the writer. The people I have come into contact with in my time here have been one of two things-helpful or total motherf*cking losers who like to spend their time thinking they are god's gift to Earth and that their opinion is the be all and end all of everything. I am telling you it is not. I know my music and know that this song isn't half as good as the other songs I have posted. Even though they were quite short and simple they had a meaning and a plot. I just thought of words that sounded deep and that rhymed and stuck them into a song, something that took me all of 3 minutes. Now for this song to get more praise than any of my other songs really shows how utterly predictable and juvenile this forum is. I am sure now I will get many people once again arguing the toss with me on this thread about how I am wrong-AGAIN. But face facts-I am right...AGAIN.