Help with a sonnet
 

I have to write a sonnet for my Lit class...

I thought it would be neat to come here, and have each person submit one line for my poem......if the first person would please submit the first line....and the following people each add on a line

here are the guidelines for a sonnet

written in Iambic Pentameter(5 sets of one stressed and one unstressed syllabul..basically just make sure your line has 10 syllabuls)

each line has to ryme with the line 2 posts above....

For Example: Post 1:...................cat
Post 2:...................dog
Post 3:....................hat
Post 4:....................log
then a new quatrain starts and the rhyme scheme can start over

the first person can pick the topic as long as it is one of the 7 deadly sins

remember.......3 quartains...and one couplet....the ryme scheme changes for the couplet.....both lines in the couplet must rhyme

Do your home work yourself you lazy ass.

i dont get it...

im not lazy....im just unmotivated

That is so cheating man. But good idea i wonder if Mrs. Frost would notice?

nah, she aint that good

I don't know man she is smarter than the bitch in 3rd period

SHI.T

This sonnet is due Tomorrow

Oh yeah...:) I just have to put it on the poster board bitch.

DUDe, I forgot about that. Damn, i got A2 HW too. ahhhhhhhhh!

Ok...I just finished mine. What would you grade it, knowing that I am a student and not a poet. And that it was very forced

My pride is like a blanket to my eyes
I have become my own worst enemy
I’m left with none but wicked alibis
And with my arrogance that frightens me
All of my sins fall beyond forgiveness
And all of my faults are beyond compare
My indulgence a crime beyond excess
For I live a life beyond repair
But what has the man who has but himself
Except a lifetimes worth of his regrets
I hang my foolish pride upon the shelf
Occupied by self indulgent debts

There is no couplet....still working on that.....
The only part I really dislike is
"Left with none but wicked alibis"
that line blows...the rest is ok

don't worry, mines worse.