Is this a good rap?

fleX7 · 11-16-2016, 03:28 PM

Okay first of all im 12 and i enjoy rapping but im not an expert at it + its prob my first rap i've ever written so if you think its bad then i would apprieciate if you could actually give me some suggestions or tell me what would you change. Here is the rap

(Verse 1)
Feeling like i got it. Like im a superman, batman. Like i win everytime i spit. 59 bars in the street. With fatties and buggatis and the karate chop using nun chunks, gunload, dolla dolla rap verse (brrrrra) using rhyming words it's like living in the city of hoax and imma make them point at me And Kreskin says, "It's all a hoax" When the General chain smokes and flows with them bros while he burrowed a couple of bronze and the brokers bruised his nose

(Verse 2)
At home they comparin this situation to nam
To be someone else besides who i ...am
I am who i am because of what i've gone through,,,,, Why they call me the God MC, the lyricist
Trace this down to the roots from Genesis
The world wonder, Im still standing like pyramids
Design so vivid, every brick it got a story to tell im building my career up like, im with a cartel and if you hatin on me then please go to the doctor and check if u ok. Cause i kno the day is gonna come

Ol’ Qwerty Bastard · 11-16-2016, 03:29 PM

yes

Lucem Ferre · 11-17-2016, 01:05 AM

It sucks.

I suggest you quit rapping.

derek · 12-18-2016, 01:13 PM

have to hear what it sounds like really.

Meth Rollins · 12-18-2016, 04:55 PM

You're gonna go places kid.

Mindy · 12-19-2016, 06:19 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Meth Rollins

You're gonna go places kid.

i can never tell if the raps are good unless i hear it on the beat

bulbasaur · 12-21-2016, 05:36 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mindfulness

i can never tell if the raps are good unless i hear it on the beat

http://puu.sh/sWtEj/52bbd66880.mp3

flames

Ol’ Qwerty Bastard · 12-21-2016, 06:15 AM

wow that was a good one

Denes32 · 02-27-2017, 04:07 PM

No

Reformed Junkie · 03-24-2017, 06:24 AM

Terrible if u want to know why read it

11-16-2016, 03:28 PM	#1 (permalink)
fleX7 Groupie Join Date: Nov 2016 Posts: 1	Is this a good rap? Okay first of all im 12 and i enjoy rapping but im not an expert at it + its prob my first rap i've ever written so if you think its bad then i would apprieciate if you could actually give me some suggestions or tell me what would you change. Here is the rap (Verse 1) Feeling like i got it. Like im a superman, batman. Like i win everytime i spit. 59 bars in the street. With fatties and buggatis and the karate chop using nun chunks, gunload, dolla dolla rap verse (brrrrra) using rhyming words it's like living in the city of hoax and imma make them point at me And Kreskin says, "It's all a hoax" When the General chain smokes and flows with them bros while he burrowed a couple of bronze and the brokers bruised his nose (Verse 2) At home they comparin this situation to nam To be someone else besides who i ...am I am who i am because of what i've gone through,,,,, Why they call me the God MC, the lyricist Trace this down to the roots from Genesis The world wonder, Im still standing like pyramids Design so vivid, every brick it got a story to tell im building my career up like, im with a cartel and if you hatin on me then please go to the doctor and check if u ok. Cause i kno the day is gonna come

12-18-2016, 01:13 PM	#4 (permalink)
derek Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2010 Posts: 778	have to hear what it sounds like really. __________________ ------------------- WARNING: DONT WATCH IF YOU'RE A PRUDE Stellar...."Vibrato" music video https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pOmTdFpIDX8

12-18-2016, 04:55 PM	#5 (permalink)
Meth Rollins Groupie Join Date: Dec 2016 Posts: 27	You're gonna go places kid.

02-27-2017, 04:07 PM	#9 (permalink)
Denes32 Groupie Join Date: Feb 2017 Posts: 19	No

03-24-2017, 06:24 AM	#10 (permalink)
Reformed Junkie Groupie Join Date: Mar 2017 Posts: 4	Terrible if u want to know why read it