Is this a good rap?
 

Okay first of all im 12 and i enjoy rapping but im not an expert at it + its prob my first rap i've ever written so if you think its bad then i would apprieciate if you could actually give me some suggestions or tell me what would you change. Here is the rap


(Verse 1)
Feeling like i got it. Like im a superman, batman. Like i win everytime i spit. 59 bars in the street. With fatties and buggatis and the karate chop using nun chunks, gunload, dolla dolla rap verse (brrrrra) using rhyming words it's like living in the city of hoax and imma make them point at me And Kreskin says, "It's all a hoax" When the General chain smokes and flows with them bros while he burrowed a couple of bronze and the brokers bruised his nose

(Verse 2)
At home they comparin this situation to nam
To be someone else besides who i ...am
I am who i am because of what i've gone through,,,,, Why they call me the God MC, the lyricist
Trace this down to the roots from Genesis
The world wonder, Im still standing like pyramids
Design so vivid, every brick it got a story to tell im building my career up like, im with a cartel and if you hatin on me then please go to the doctor and check if u ok. Cause i kno the day is gonna come

yes

It sucks.

I suggest you quit rapping.

have to hear what it sounds like really.

You're gonna go places kid.

:laughing:

i can never tell if the raps are good unless i hear it on the beat

http://puu.sh/sWtEj/52bbd66880.mp3

flames

wow that was a good one

No

Terrible if u want to know why read it

not bad homie. depends on the beats tho . the flow you are using is important too