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Originally Posted by Paedantic Basterd (Post 1770951)

I've been playing around with screenwriting as a hobby for a while now. In the last month I started to write my first feature-length script. I've got three major characters, each with a complete character arc mapped out from start to finish, and I've got the major events planned, but there's a problem. After putting pen to paper (so to speak), my "feature-length" script is roughly 50 pages. Typically a feature of this nature is more like 120 pages (at ~1 minute per page).

Soooo now I'm like, wha'd I do wrong? Is it possible to get to the point too quickly in a story? Am I destined to write for television rather than film? Am I missing some kind of subplot to resolve in Act II?

I lost the motivation to finish it after realizing there was something fundamentally wrong in my structure and pacing for it to be so short.

Add a car chase and a trippy dream sequence.

Don't force it. Put the script away for a week or so and come back to it and try and find if there's anything you can add or elaborate on. If not, that's fine. Not everyone can start off making major motion pictures. Some topics and ideas are better meant for TV or short films. The important thing is to not waste or ruin what you've already worked so hard on just because it isn't what you expected.

Have an orgy in humanity's last stronghold in the center of the earth and set it to bad techno.

I think you're right Deej. My story gets to the point too fast for a feature, and I need to cram more events into Act II and somehow have that feel as if it'd be likely to happen, which means the events need to result somehow from the behaviours of my characters while also inciting them to change. It can't all be people sitting around and giving each other insights passively while they talk about themselves (I guess I feel like that's more or less what it boils down to on the page).

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Originally Posted by Qwertyy (Post 1770990)

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Originally Posted by The Batlord (Post 1771000)

Have an orgy in humanity's last stronghold in the center of the earth and set it to bad techno.

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Originally Posted by Janszoon (Post 1770987)

Add a car chase and a trippy dream sequence.

All wonderful advice, especially the last two pieces. :laughing:

I received my 2 grams of Don Joyce's ashes today.

How the f*ck did you get that?

You're f*cking weird.

What a ****ing coincidence. I just listened to them for the first time a couple days ago.

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Originally Posted by Exo (Post 1771186)

You're f*cking weird.

I'm going to sell them for ten million dollars in fifteen years.