What are you Writing now?

OccultHawk · 01-29-2018, 04:01 AM

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Originally Posted by Oriphiel

It was a bit long.

It took place over the course of years.

Oriphiel · 01-29-2018, 04:21 AM

That's no excuse. One sentence, or GTFO.

She could still hear the laughter that greeted her as she woke, their faces staring down at her through the light, the soft kiss of soiled cotton around her ankles.

See? Treat your audience like a hooker. Just get in, and then get out. The ambiguity that comes from excessive brevity will make your story seem much deeper than it actually is.

Trollheart · 01-29-2018, 05:14 AM

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Originally Posted by OccultHawk

Irony by OccultHawk

There once was a lady who always wore clean underwear in case she had to go to the emergency room. Then, one day, she had an accident. And then she had another accident. The entire emergency team at the ER laughed and laughed. Years later, they still joke about it.

tl;dr

Quote:

Originally Posted by Oriphiel

That's no excuse. One sentence, or GTFO.

She could still hear the laughter that greeted her as she woke, their faces staring down at her through the light, the soft kiss of soiled cotton around her ankles.

See? Treat your audience like a hooker. Just get in, and then get out. The ambiguity that comes from excessive brevity will make your story seem much deeper than it actually is.

tl;dr

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