What are you Writing now?

Trollheart · 05-11-2018, 03:52 PM

Sunset Eyes

All right, this was a cyberpunk thing, wasn't it? I'm not great with them. I couldn't follow this. Some enhanced rogue cyborg or something, but I really don't know what the story was supposed to be. It was extremely well written, in I'd say a kind of Philip K Dick way, but the idea that you were kind of supposed to know everything that was being spoken about, and that nothing was adequately explained, left me a little lost. The ending was odd, too, though I had sort of gathered by the last few pages that it was not going to end with any sort of real resolution.

Well written, great imagery but the story plotline is something I found next to impossible to follow. Still, I'll give it a decent 6/10

Edit: All right, the next one has SIXTY-SEVEN pages. Don't expect a report for a few days.

Oriphiel · 05-11-2018, 05:55 PM

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Originally Posted by Trollheart

Sunset Eyes

All right, this was a cyberpunk thing, wasn't it? I'm not great with them. I couldn't follow this. Some enhanced rogue cyborg or something, but I really don't know what the story was supposed to be. It was extremely well written, in I'd say a kind of Philip K Dick way, but the idea that you were kind of supposed to know everything that was being spoken about, and that nothing was adequately explained, left me a little lost. The ending was odd, too, though I had sort of gathered by the last few pages that it was not going to end with any sort of real resolution.

Well written, great imagery but the story plotline is something I found next to impossible to follow. Still, I'll give it a decent 6/10

Edit: All right, the next one has SIXTY-SEVEN pages. Don't expect a report for a few days.

Woah, 6/10 is actually way more than I was expecting.

Never read any of Philip K. Dick's works, or really all that much Sci-Fi in general, though I have read many of William Gibson's novels. Neuromancer is probably my favorite book of all time, and it pretty much ruined me and the way I approach the genre. I just dive right in and expect the reader to figure out and interpret what's going on.

DwnWthVwls · 05-11-2018, 06:00 PM

Ori, write me a short story about a group of post-apoc survivors who outcast their best survivalist for being socially awkward and then get hunted and eaten by her.

Trollheart · 05-11-2018, 06:23 PM

Reading Motor Girl now. Just wanted to check with you: obviously no way I would rob your idea, but it's lit a candle in my head about another story I'd like to write. It is nothing at all to do with yours, but something Nancy said kind of gave me the idea. Are you okay with that? I'll fill you in more on it if you want, or when it's written I'll send you a copy so you can see if it looks like I've ripped anything off from you, though I promise I won't. It's just this tiny spark that you lit that has sent my mind off in a totally different, yet very slightly similar direction. If it ever gets published I'd be happy to credit some of the idea to you if you want.

Keep in mind that I am only a few pages in, so I don't know how your story will turn out, but I already know it's not going to be the same as the one I've thought of. Truth is, I thought yours was going to go in that direction, and when it didn't, I thought, hell that's not a bad idea though. I can work with that.

You cool with that Ori? If you want more info or clarification let me know.
Thanks

Trollheart · 05-11-2018, 06:25 PM

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Originally Posted by Oriphiel

Woah, 6/10 is actually way more than I was expecting.

Never read any of Philip K. Dick's works, or really all that much Sci-Fi in general, though I have read many of William Gibson's novels. Neuromancer is probably my favorite book of all time, and it pretty much ruined me and the way I approach the genre. I just dive right in and expect the reader to figure out and interpret what's going on.

No me neither, but you've seen Blade Runner of course, and then that series Electric Dreams, maybe? Yeah that wasn't a story I enjoyed because I was lost in it, but I can definitely acknowledge the quality of the writing that went into it, and can vaguely see where you were going. Maybe.

DwnWthVwls · 05-11-2018, 06:26 PM

There once was a man named Jack,
he tickled the Batlords crack.
When he came up for air,
after accepting his dare,
he died.

The end.

Trollheart · 05-11-2018, 06:29 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by DwnWthVwls

There once was a man named Jack,
he tickled the Batlords crack.
When he came up for air,
after accepting his dare,
he died.

The end.

Nah man, you want the Rhyming Thread. Over that way, turn left after the burned-out cars. Can't miss it.

DwnWthVwls · 05-11-2018, 06:30 PM

Poems don't count as writing? I'd call you a pretentious fuck, but I think a simple, "whatever Frownland" is way more insulting.

**Frownland** · 05-11-2018, 06:35 PM

I would never say that something's not something that it's obviously thinging.

Trollheart · 05-11-2018, 06:40 PM

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Originally Posted by DwnWthVwls

Poems don't count as writing? I'd call you a pretentious fuck, but I think a simple, "whatever Frownland" is way more insulting.

Not sure poems can count.
Touchy much? It was just a joke, Mister I Hate Vowels. AND AND AND! If you hate vowels so much, how come you use them eh? Practicing what you preach, huh? Sounds a bit dodgy to me...

05-11-2018, 03:52 PM	#671 (permalink)
Trollheart Born to be mild Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: 404 Not Found Posts: 26,992	*Sunset Eyes* All right, this was a cyberpunk thing, wasn't it? I'm not great with them. I couldn't follow this. Some enhanced rogue cyborg or something, but I really don't know what the story was supposed to be. It was extremely well written, in I'd say a kind of Philip K Dick way, but the idea that you were kind of supposed to know everything that was being spoken about, and that nothing was adequately explained, left me a little lost. The ending was odd, too, though I had sort of gathered by the last few pages that it was not going to end with any sort of real resolution. Well written, great imagery but the story plotline is something I found next to impossible to follow. Still, I'll give it a decent 6/10 Edit: All right, the next one has SIXTY-SEVEN pages. Don't expect a report for a few days. __________________ Trollheart: Signature-free since April 2018

05-11-2018, 06:23 PM	#674 (permalink)
Trollheart Born to be mild Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: 404 Not Found Posts: 26,992	Reading Motor Girl now. Just wanted to check with you: obviously no way I would rob your idea, but it's lit a candle in my head about another story I'd like to write. It is nothing at all to do with yours, but something Nancy said kind of gave me the idea. Are you okay with that? I'll fill you in more on it if you want, or when it's written I'll send you a copy so you can see if it looks like I've ripped anything off from you, though I promise I won't. It's just this tiny spark that you lit that has sent my mind off in a totally different, yet very slightly similar direction. If it ever gets published I'd be happy to credit some of the idea to you if you want. Keep in mind that I am only a few pages in, so I don't know how your story will turn out, but I already know it's not going to be the same as the one I've thought of. Truth is, I thought yours was going to go in that direction, and when it didn't, I thought, hell that's not a bad idea though. I can work with that. You cool with that Ori? If you want more info or clarification let me know. Thanks __________________ Trollheart: Signature-free since April 2018

05-11-2018, 06:35 PM	#679 (permalink)
Frownland SOPHIE FOREVER Join Date: Aug 2011 Location: East of the Southern North American West Posts: 35,541	I would never say that something's not something that it's obviously thinging. __________________ Studies show that when a given norm is changed in the face of the unchanging, the remaining contradictions will parallel the truth. d e a f b o x