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12-22-2017, 04:08 PM | #401 (permalink) |
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Yeah, who cares what some MB *******s say about one's stuff.
I'm barely even traumatized and bitter from that one time I put something up here and nobody really dug it.
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12-22-2017, 04:08 PM | #402 (permalink) | ||
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12-22-2017, 04:09 PM | #403 (permalink) |
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I really liked your imagery and style, but the concept was kind of lost on me. It was translated, right? Is there a big difference between the original and the English version in your eyes?
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12-22-2017, 04:13 PM | #405 (permalink) | |
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12-22-2017, 04:14 PM | #406 (permalink) | ||
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I guess there is. German is just better suited for long-ass sentences. Pretty sure I'm also not the greatest translator. The concept might still be lost on you in the original as well, though. Quote:
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12-22-2017, 04:24 PM | #408 (permalink) | |
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The first piece I never wrote on the other site; The second piece was when I was starting out and it isn't especially good. I did get some decent criticism on a couple chapters on the book I wrote and have yet to publish. Again they told me what they thought was wrong and one guy even gave me a couple ideas. I also entered a few contests finally winning one. I'd post that one but it was from a contest where you're doing a twist on somebody else's work.
Here's a flash fiction I wrote for a contest that was judged by three people. It's limited to 650 words so it isn't exactly fleshed out. Two people thought it was an original twist on James Bond while another, well, made Simon Cowell look like Polyanna of the seas. Anyway, there are many ways to do a critique (and no, I didn't win) Quote:
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