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12-22-2017, 02:58 PM | #391 (permalink) |
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Are you only capable of avoiding predictability when you write on darker themes or something?
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12-22-2017, 03:09 PM | #392 (permalink) | |
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I don't think so. Besides, I could argue Edgar Allan Poe or Stephen King is predictable. I mean you know something horrible is going to happen.
This is something I originally had in my now deleted journal. I wrote this like four years ago and it's pretty awful actually, but this is a better example of what I write. Quote:
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12-22-2017, 03:14 PM | #393 (permalink) |
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You could say the same for any satire: something funny is going to happen. That doesn't mean that the way that the comedy or horror comes about can't be unpredictable. EAP's stories are surprising to this day and while I hate his writing style, King can come up with a good plot (until he gets to the ending, that is) so those aren't good examples, really.
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12-22-2017, 03:20 PM | #394 (permalink) |
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Since I began reading him (late I know, so sue me) Dickens's grasp of the plot twist has just bowled me over. I think I have his story all figured out and suddenly everything gets turned upside down. I won't say the guy invented the model for the novel, but by god he contributed a hell of a lot to it. You could do worse than study his work. We all could.
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12-22-2017, 03:24 PM | #395 (permalink) | |
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The problem I see with this (assuming this is the whole thing) is that it goes nowhere and does nothing. It's kind of maybe trippy on one level, but it's completely, to me, anyway, unsatisfactory. It establishes nothing, leaves you with questions that are not only not answered (which is not always a problem in writing) but others that aren't even asked. It's just basically a few clever lines and ideas jammed together in the hope it will become a story and (again, allowing for the above caveat) it never really does.
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12-22-2017, 03:33 PM | #396 (permalink) | |
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But there you go. You've established that you're not really into avant-garde writing (or garbled junk in my case ) and that's okay. Look, I'm not going to become the next Truman Capote (that would be Pet Sounds ), but I've gotten to the point where I'm comfortable in my own skin. Anyway, I'm really here for the music. Your critiques are brutal, Troll, but you're still a great writer. |
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12-22-2017, 03:42 PM | #397 (permalink) | |
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I have another thing to post soon anyway.
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12-22-2017, 03:54 PM | #398 (permalink) |
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It's not that you critique so much, Trolls. It's more about style. At the writing forum we'd have to critique some pretty atrocious stuff as you can imagine. A good critique there would certainly attack the flaws with the piece, but then we'd say something encouraging mentioning the one or two things we'd actually like about a piece, kind of like you did in the second critique. I didn't see that in your first critique; the only thing I saw was that I sucked.
Anyway, I won't post any writing in this thread for a while. Certainly be constructive with your criticism, but don't come off like Simon Cowell if you want people to post their writing here. |
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