im new, just wanted to post a song that i wrote and hope to get an oppinion back,1-10 (lyrics, pink floyd)

nextcharmichle · 11-11-2004, 08:50 PM

(steel string acoust tuned in drop d) { "i exist to!!!" }
INTRO: -------------
hello hello?? is anyone there,,to see me,, fined me, i see you.
yes, you there! so long so long, ive looked around you, to see you sittin there, in my world of wonder, the lady in the room, she seems really nice, why do you treat her like you do, like you do.
CHORUS: (main)
you see my wondering?? no,no you dont. i have been here a long long time, with everyone here, but to fined mysef totaly alone. the people they come and go, but only to fined myself, totaly alone.
CHORUS: (secondary)
here we are, again, in the same old path, on the same old trail, hello hello?is anyone out there, to see me, to fined me, sittin all alone, now somthing catches my eye as im growing up, my mom hits the floor, that nice nice lady, down she goes, you! you there! standing above her, seeming to hate. dad, why to you treat the nice lady i call mom so? (repet main chorus)
OUTTRO: now im being seen, in the world we call home, i understand now why you treat me so, for we dont have much money in the pocket, nor to much food on the table, but there is always someone to blame, isnt there, no, i fined that wrong, all she did was help, while you,,you!! sat there to discriminate, well, thanks alot. i under stand now, can you see me?
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so, what do you guys think,,1-10?? you guys probably think im some abused kid in a world of hate, im not, sure my perants argue every once in a wile, but who doesnt?? i just wrote that because of when they got in a bad fight one day, i got mad. its all good now. so, post your oppinion

11-11-2004, 08:50 PM	#1 (permalink)
nextcharmichle Groupie Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 4	im new, just wanted to post a song that i wrote and hope to get an oppinion back,1-10 (steel string acoust tuned in drop d) { "i exist to!!!" } INTRO: ------------- hello hello?? is anyone there,,to see me,, fined me, i see you. yes, you there! so long so long, ive looked around you, to see you sittin there, in my world of wonder, the lady in the room, she seems really nice, why do you treat her like you do, like you do. CHORUS: (main) you see my wondering?? no,no you dont. i have been here a long long time, with everyone here, but to fined mysef totaly alone. the people they come and go, but only to fined myself, totaly alone. CHORUS: (secondary) here we are, again, in the same old path, on the same old trail, hello hello?is anyone out there, to see me, to fined me, sittin all alone, now somthing catches my eye as im growing up, my mom hits the floor, that nice nice lady, down she goes, you! you there! standing above her, seeming to hate. dad, why to you treat the nice lady i call mom so? (repet main chorus) OUTTRO: now im being seen, in the world we call home, i understand now why you treat me so, for we dont have much money in the pocket, nor to much food on the table, but there is always someone to blame, isnt there, no, i fined that wrong, all she did was help, while you,,you!! sat there to discriminate, well, thanks alot. i under stand now, can you see me? - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - so, what do you guys think,,1-10?? you guys probably think im some abused kid in a world of hate, im not, sure my perants argue every once in a wile, but who doesnt?? i just wrote that because of when they got in a bad fight one day, i got mad. its all good now. so, post your oppinion