im new, just wanted to post a song that i wrote and hope to get an oppinion back,1-10

Sneer · 11-23-2004, 07:35 AM

i think its pretty good, i like the the way it tells a story. 6 id say. got a bit confused at first when u kept saying "fined", take it you mean find?! and the "hello hello" for some totally strange reason reminded of the lional richie cheese monstrosity we call "Hello?"- but that isnt your fault, just my stupid thought process. so overall, nice lyrics.

~~[MERIT]~~ · 11-23-2004, 01:05 PM

it wasnt too bad. but id be careful posting my lyrics on the net. its thick as thieves out there.

Thrice · 11-27-2004, 01:14 AM

definently way too similar to pink flloyd - comfortably numb

11-23-2004, 07:35 AM	#11 (permalink)
Sneer Let it drip Join Date: Nov 2004 Posts: 5,430	i think its pretty good, i like the the way it tells a story. 6 id say. got a bit confused at first when u kept saying "fined", take it you mean find?! and the "hello hello" for some totally strange reason reminded of the lional richie cheese monstrosity we call "Hello?"- but that isnt your fault, just my stupid thought process. so overall, nice lyrics. __________________ LastFM Sneer's Emporium of Sound Fright Team radio show

11-27-2004, 01:14 AM	#13 (permalink)
Thrice أمهاتك[وهور]Aura Euphoria Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: Florida/Buffalo/CT Posts: 2,077	definently way too similar to pink flloyd - comfortably numb __________________ Lew Harrison, who looked like an anarchist with his red eyes and fierce black beard, had been writing furiously in one corner of the room. "That's good—happiness by the kilowatt," he said. "Buy your happiness the way you buy light."

11-23-2004, 01:05 PM	#12 (permalink)
~~[MERIT]~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Missouri, USA Posts: 4,814	it wasnt too bad. but id be careful posting my lyrics on the net. its thick as thieves out there.