A favor for a terminally ill piano rocker (lyrics, drum)

acenoface · 12-17-2007, 03:22 PM

About 3 years ago, I was diagnosed with Lou Gehrig's disease, and I quit my job and started writing music to leave an artistic legacy to outlive me. I've got some songs I'm really proud of now, and they are all strongly piano-driven alt/indie tunes.

I'm trying to write a bio for my webpages, and music bios usually compare the artist with more well known bands. I am a self-admitted fuddy dutty, and I haven't been keeping up with new music for a long long time. Please have a listen to my songs here and tell me what current artists I sound like.

Here's a video, too:

littleknowitall · 12-17-2007, 03:28 PM

I love the stuff you've come out with so far, I'll try to add some constructive criticism when I'm done listening to all your stuff, although it might not be tonight, i especially love the fact that your influenced by steely dan and the beatles

I've noticed you might be having some trouble with putting the video up, assuming your using youtube just take the numbers at the end of the youtube link and put them in the youtube tags and it should work,

I have to ask how you recorded all this?

I'm just going to edit this post as I'm listening to your stuff, I'm looking specifically at 'no one lies about being lonely' right now, I'm trying to look for things to criticize right now just to be constructive and i assure you I'm not being sincere right now i assure you but I'm not finding much, I mean this is a great mix, the progressive piano riff is lovely and the vocal melody settles over it perfectly, I'd have possibly dabbled with some effects on the main vocal line on the first set of 'no one lies' but it's noting missing just I think it would have added a bit of presence, i might have gone a step higher with the backing vocals too and really pushed them but they are lovely as they are.
A drum track behind some of these would have been really nice which can be easily done messing round with a software package like cubase,
But as a track, it's beautifull, i mean really. Your lyrics aren't crap either which you find with most unsigned bands you can always find a line or two that just seem forced or as if they were trying to rhyme or they just don't fit but really the way you've constructed your lyrics I can't find that here, I'd be inclined to say that as lovely as the vocal melody is a middle 8 with a fair bit of punch in it would be a nice touch, it's a little repetative but it's nothing I'd pick up on unless I was taking this much focus.

Right, back to listening

nighttime always knows -

Can definately hear the beatles influence in this one in the chord prgressions, second half of first verse might be my headphones but that fuzzy accompniment really until you take it higher up on ' share them with the night' it is just a bit of fuzz for me, i just noticed the use of drums which im really glad about, your keyboard playing is very smoothe and i am quite fond of the way it's constructed.
I am noticing a pattern in the way there's a lot of repetition in your lyrics, It's not really bothering me though which is surprising.
But i do find your slightly in need of a little bit of 'mixing it up a little' somewhere in one of your songs, i speak too soon, haha, just got to that lovely guitar solo on the fade out. Well that was a nice one and I'm still not displeased.
I think I'll keep listening.

littleknowitall · 12-17-2007, 04:02 PM

i just wrote about all four songs, and my post cancelled because i used one too many emoticons apparently, damn you MB!
im really not gunna go through all that typing again but good stuff none the less.

acenoface · 12-19-2007, 11:30 AM

Thanks, but what artists would you say I sound like?

12-17-2007, 03:22 PM	#1 (permalink)
acenoface Groupie Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: East Lansing, MI Posts: 21	A favor for a terminally ill piano rocker About 3 years ago, I was diagnosed with Lou Gehrig's disease, and I quit my job and started writing music to leave an artistic legacy to outlive me. I've got some songs I'm really proud of now, and they are all strongly piano-driven alt/indie tunes. I'm trying to write a bio for my webpages, and music bios usually compare the artist with more well known bands. I am a self-admitted fuddy dutty, and I haven't been keeping up with new music for a long long time. Please have a listen to my songs here and tell me what current artists I sound like. Here's a video, too: __________________ Last edited by acenoface; 12-17-2007 at 03:43 PM.

12-17-2007, 03:28 PM	#2 (permalink)
littleknowitall Pow! Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 1,671	I love the stuff you've come out with so far, I'll try to add some constructive criticism when I'm done listening to all your stuff, although it might not be tonight, i especially love the fact that your influenced by steely dan and the beatles I've noticed you might be having some trouble with putting the video up, assuming your using youtube just take the numbers at the end of the youtube link and put them in the youtube tags and it should work, I have to ask how you recorded all this? I'm just going to edit this post as I'm listening to your stuff, I'm looking specifically at 'no one lies about being lonely' right now, I'm trying to look for things to criticize right now just to be constructive and i assure you I'm not being sincere right now i assure you but I'm not finding much, I mean this is a great mix, the progressive piano riff is lovely and the vocal melody settles over it perfectly, I'd have possibly dabbled with some effects on the main vocal line on the first set of 'no one lies' but it's noting missing just I think it would have added a bit of presence, i might have gone a step higher with the backing vocals too and really pushed them but they are lovely as they are. A drum track behind some of these would have been really nice which can be easily done messing round with a software package like cubase, But as a track, it's beautifull, i mean really. Your lyrics aren't crap either which you find with most unsigned bands you can always find a line or two that just seem forced or as if they were trying to rhyme or they just don't fit but really the way you've constructed your lyrics I can't find that here, I'd be inclined to say that as lovely as the vocal melody is a middle 8 with a fair bit of punch in it would be a nice touch, it's a little repetative but it's nothing I'd pick up on unless I was taking this much focus. Right, back to listening nighttime always knows - Can definately hear the beatles influence in this one in the chord prgressions, second half of first verse might be my headphones but that fuzzy accompniment really until you take it higher up on ' share them with the night' it is just a bit of fuzz for me, i just noticed the use of drums which im really glad about, your keyboard playing is very smoothe and i am quite fond of the way it's constructed. I am noticing a pattern in the way there's a lot of repetition in your lyrics, It's not really bothering me though which is surprising. But i do find your slightly in need of a little bit of 'mixing it up a little' somewhere in one of your songs, i speak too soon, haha, just got to that lovely guitar solo on the fade out. Well that was a nice one and I'm still not displeased. I think I'll keep listening. Last edited by littleknowitall; 12-17-2007 at 03:48 PM.

12-19-2007, 11:30 AM	#4 (permalink)
acenoface Groupie Join Date: Dec 2007 Location: East Lansing, MI Posts: 21	Thanks, but what artists would you say I sound like? __________________

12-17-2007, 04:02 PM	#3 (permalink)
littleknowitall Pow! Join Date: Dec 2005 Posts: 1,671	i just wrote about all four songs, and my post cancelled because i used one too many emoticons apparently, damn you MB! im really not gunna go through all that typing again but good stuff none the less.