^not bad. really literal. I don't know if thats what you were going for, but I do like when people just come out and say what they're writing about.

a quick glance for reassurance. a distress signal pattern emitted, transmitted. erupt. disrupt. diagonal dips and swivels swoon. this couldn't be said in print. comprehension skips over this. hands raise and hip shake. face touches face, skin to skin, on the pavement.