In need of lyrics..help plz

emokid90 · 12-05-2004, 08:52 AM

Try writin down feelings. Not as lyrics, just how ur feelin.Then if u get stuck for a next line u can use those ideas. They wont sound fake if they're real feelings. It worked 4 me. And if u want 2 finish the song l8r then they can remind u of what u wer writin about

ArtistInTheAmbulance · 12-05-2004, 10:39 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by craigdavies

Disposable lover

I’m walking down the line that divides you and me,
There’s something inside, there’s more to your life,
Is it you who decides, if there is a you and me,
Handle me with care my heartbreaks easily.

Just do what you want now,
Don’t keep it inside,
Or it’ll be the end of your life,

Burn the pictures, forget the signs,
The line is now miles and it can’t be changed,
Oceans separate you and me,
Hearts no longer intertwined,
Struck down by your hate,
I lie bleeding across your flour.

To die is what I long for,
Kill me, bleed me,
Take my life like the love you once gave me,
I have nothing to live for,
Dispose of me now forget my love.
I’m nothing without you,
Just an empty shell of what was you and me.

Forget me, you don’t love me,
I’m your disposable love,
Used and abused,
Fulfill my destiny.
Kill me.

That was amazing! Trés bon... Ok that's all the french I know. Tis good anyways

Denver Max · 12-05-2004, 01:05 PM

When using metaphors... don't get too carried away. If you start your song with no base, then nobody can realize what the metaphor stems from and it seems like pointless gibberish. One of the simplest examples that I can think of comes from a brand new song "you are the blood in my veins" that line is simple, understandable, but still requires some thought

Blood in your veins... you need blood to live or exist, therefor, I would not exist without you

Once you think of it in those terms it becomes easier to use metaphors.

hell... writing this and talking about blood and such gave me and Idea

This is another generic love song
About another broken heart
With the vain intent
That you'll attempt
To listen good and hard

This is just another kid
His eyes bleeding salty rain
Trying unsuccesfully to hide the scars she left
beneath his chest

(chrorus?)
So this is a love song...
And I'll present my pain
in a way
make clever and new
it could never happen to you (please... please take this as the sarcasm it is)

And this is another sheet of paper
molested by the pen
perverted to recieve
some remnants of me

not done... but anyway... this is a really rough few verses of a song I'm apparently writing. it's just inspiration, when you feel something stronger then usual or think of an apt metaphor for no reason, write it down, it could inspire you. so my advice is always keep some paper nearby.

ArtistInTheAmbulance · 12-06-2004, 10:53 AM

Woah, everyone else seems really good at this.
Whenever I do it I end up stabbing the page with my pen..

emokid90 · 12-06-2004, 11:31 AM

All the songs i read kick ass! Why do mine suck! I guess some ppl r born gifted n others r just born.

covle · 12-06-2004, 11:14 PM

everybody writes differently. a lot of this advice is good, but people telling you how they write doesnt really help. just keep trying things until you find a way your comfortable with and happy with what your creating. dont write to please anyone else. write to express what your feeling to YOU. writeing doesnt have to be for the audiance. even if your writing for a band, nobody has to know exactly what you are writing about. the main thing is just please yourself.

12-06-2004, 10:53 AM	#14 (permalink)
ArtistInTheAmbulance enchanted. Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: cornwailles, angleterre. Posts: 2,537	Woah, everyone else seems really good at this. Whenever I do it I end up stabbing the page with my pen.. __________________ shake your wings like theyre laced with sound!

12-06-2004, 11:14 PM	#16 (permalink)
covle Music Addict Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: melbourne australia Posts: 334	everybody writes differently. a lot of this advice is good, but people telling you how they write doesnt really help. just keep trying things until you find a way your comfortable with and happy with what your creating. dont write to please anyone else. write to express what your feeling to YOU. writeing doesnt have to be for the audiance. even if your writing for a band, nobody has to know exactly what you are writing about. the main thing is just please yourself. __________________ LIVE.LOVE.BURN.DIE. whoa...i quoted atreyu, that means im hardcore. look how hardcore i am!! thats hardcore...XXX

12-05-2004, 08:52 AM	#11 (permalink)
emokid90 Groupie Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Wigan, Eng. Posts: 26	Try writin down feelings. Not as lyrics, just how ur feelin.Then if u get stuck for a next line u can use those ideas. They wont sound fake if they're real feelings. It worked 4 me. And if u want 2 finish the song l8r then they can remind u of what u wer writin about

12-05-2004, 01:05 PM	#13 (permalink)
Denver Max Groupie Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Washington State Posts: 16	When using metaphors... don't get too carried away. If you start your song with no base, then nobody can realize what the metaphor stems from and it seems like pointless gibberish. One of the simplest examples that I can think of comes from a brand new song "you are the blood in my veins" that line is simple, understandable, but still requires some thought Blood in your veins... you need blood to live or exist, therefor, I would not exist without you Once you think of it in those terms it becomes easier to use metaphors. hell... writing this and talking about blood and such gave me and Idea This is another generic love song About another broken heart With the vain intent That you'll attempt To listen good and hard This is just another kid His eyes bleeding salty rain Trying unsuccesfully to hide the scars she left beneath his chest (chrorus?) So this is a love song... And I'll present my pain in a way make clever and new it could never happen to you (please... please take this as the sarcasm it is) And this is another sheet of paper molested by the pen perverted to recieve some remnants of me not done... but anyway... this is a really rough few verses of a song I'm apparently writing. it's just inspiration, when you feel something stronger then usual or think of an apt metaphor for no reason, write it down, it could inspire you. so my advice is always keep some paper nearby.

12-06-2004, 11:31 AM	#15 (permalink)
emokid90 Groupie Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Wigan, Eng. Posts: 26	All the songs i read kick ass! Why do mine suck! I guess some ppl r born gifted n others r just born.