Originally Posted by TheBig3

Don't feed the trolls. It's obviously his act. You can sneak your way to stardom. And certainly not with those lyrics.

My two cents:

1. You need to be less cryptic and more honest with your writing
2. You need to internalize that these feelings aren't unique, and almost universal, and therefore the writing has to carry it, not the concept.
3. Stop listening to nu-metal, a genre full of people who ignore rules 1 & 2