Please help and recommendations!
 

This is my preview, already its not finished, but i would like to know if this could interest when i change some aspects and mastered it. (change the vocal, some transitions, etc.)

Thanks you very much and best regards. (Sorry for my english)
link youtube:

You two chuckle****s came to the wrong basketball court.
My game is flawless foolz.

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