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06-10-2010, 10:51 PM | #1 (permalink) |
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Bibio - Mind Bokeh
Well Landfill is already posted here, but I would like to post my other lyrics for criticism because I am starting to get stuck with some of these ideas, and I think I'm starting to sound too generic but we'll see what you think.
Ugly: blowing hot air or running in place you can call it what you want but it all ends the same you and i, saying goodbye with a 6 hour car ride to think about the times where i could have crossed your lines where i could have crossed your lines sometimes things gotta be ugly sometimes the details dont always aline several years of impatienceness and tears------(impatienceness isn't a word lol) has brought me to this humble peace of mind sometimes keely you gotta be ugly oh i dont mean that literally i guess i couldn't put together the facts well at least i've got your hat, yeah how i wish i could explain all of the reasons for the rain torn down, risen up, then called a mutt i'm in love with life despite my **** ups dont get me wrong i dont mean to boast im not mohommad, gandhi, or the holy ghost it will take sometime to realize that your shoes are in the mud and your food is overdone but... you can wash your shoes brand new and you can always cook more food if that's what you decide you wanna do then you can go and get a job at the ****ing Cordon Blue the only thing thats keeping you from you, is you...is you... Company: At the drop of a dime I wish I could write you a line That could sang your attention just for a second Maybe I would say everything you wanted to hear But usually that just turns off your ears I talk too much, the only thing that has earned me a crush everything laid out these strings, off key lyrics and some green i guess i guess to much that's my moat that keeps me from your touch too nice, just a bit overwhelming im writing this for you my anonymous darling i pretend i hear you calling peak over my shoulder to find the same (nothing) feeling smooth..."whats your name?" fill in my blanks so i dont have to feel so strange ill put my best foot forward just like any other pray im clam and dont stutter this is my way of introducing myself yes i know, odd they will say but like "they" would give me the time of day, anyways Sum up im taking too long the reason why i wrote this song was to ask spend some time with me no obligations, anything you please damn its easy to ask when i feel this free Captians: The captians of the finest ships will have to answer to the cold, ridged hand of nature under their sea-coats lies the blueprints to their psychotic plans at the sake of all of these men, at the sake of all of these men Left out at sea with no answer or plea to the letters from where they live left abandon their hopes, their wives and their folks with their children's unpainted cribs where do your memories go when these men fail to afloat? those nights you lie awake wondering where they lie in the oceans throat [this song is not finished but i wanted to post the idea] Grandpa: i know where i come from an iron fist showed me no resentment in my analogies im completely filled with glee i sure will miss you, richie you know you meant the world to me marble blue eyes with a hankee in his pocket spread the kind of love anyone could drown in no way to thank you for all that you've done the most loved man, underneath our great sun Push: the apathy of your creators was the source of all of your losses your glazed eyes and low voice were the only treasures that you'd inherit left out in the open in the cold air with time to kill these were your invitations to change set-backs fall in like steady rain searching for fellowship showed you nothing but vacant interest my faith would be lost too if i viewed humanity as you do we know its deeper than that layer streached out called skin i beg you wont be mislead there is much more than you know shaking he mutters to me a statement spoken by only those bold as he ive grown too tired to forgive myself sick of the hand i was dealt i know where my roots lay they reside in soft watery clay i'll continue this osculating path until my mind can erase my past holes dug these are my holes that are dug no help, please no help my friend i will see you on the other end The Mirror Inside My Mind: do not act like you cant hear me im your thoughts, your dreams the wonders between im what enables you to dream so dont forget who calls the shots but your muscles are the force that twists this plot where does your light go when you are surrounded by shadows? im you're afraid dont feel strange remember that im the animal inside this cage as i write you from this mirror i view a war between me and you as mornings creep into the afternoon mearly a puppet in this capitalist play oh my mind wonders far away currency honestly disgusts me and yet i will forever belong with the worker-bees colorless expressions this mirror gives my brain talks to me he says hello, cheers up and saddens the maybe he isn't a he, but id like to think it ought to be i do not control this brain it simply has its own autonomy there is no one i would rather meet than this mind of mine im sure it will happen, may just take some time [note to moderators this will my thread for my music from now on, i'll just add landfill on here later so you can delete the other posts of mine on this section of the forum] im tired...and i'll post more later. please give me your feedback, i have thick skin, and your ideas will only make my lyrics better. thanks for looking!!!
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06-10-2010, 11:49 PM | #2 (permalink) | |
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I agree that your stuff does sound pretty generic (sorry), but some of the ideas are good and I would like to see more from you. I especially liked Ugly and the lines:
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09-13-2010, 04:17 PM | #3 (permalink) |
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Here are a few of my guitar lines that i have made recordings of with just a head-set mic. Nothing official but some good ideas.
http://www.mediafire.com/?w7cwlaud4iuon
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09-21-2010, 04:29 PM | #4 (permalink) |
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/bump : a few extremely rough, with many mistakes, recordings are linked from mediafire. let me know what you think.
thanks playazz, ems
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09-21-2010, 11:01 PM | #5 (permalink) |
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sound quality wasn't actually too bad.
Idea 1 was really nice. Your playing is excellent. Reminds me of the jams and recordings I used to do on my old acoustic, now I'm getting super nostalgic. Around 2:30 was my favorite section. I would love to hear vocals on this, maybe even a little cello here and there. Keep it up. Will listen to more as I get the time. |
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Bibio - Mind Bokeh
The newest creation from Bibio: Mind Bokeh
First time through this cd I was completely swept away. They have tracks similar to Ambivalence Avenue, but they evolved further into their complexity of their productions and explored some new content as well. Listening to it right now...and I'm straight up melting.
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03-31-2011, 07:27 PM | #10 (permalink) |
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Definitely not as appealing as Ambivalence Avenue so far. Then again that one took about 5 spins to really strike me. This one just doesn't seem as deep, but we'll see.
One thing I don't like is that it borrows some things from AA. And rather than sounding like he was trying to tie the records together, it comes off sounding more like he has trouble coming up with new ideas. Jury's still out, not voting yet. This rating scale is wack though. Isn't "above average" the same as good? Seems like it should just be Terrible, Poor, Average, Good, Excellent. Not Above Average.
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