Why do people think every song has to have a rhyming scheme like:
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Word Word Word "First Last Word"
Word Word Word "Word that Rhymes With First Word"
Word Word Word "Second Last Word"
Word Word Word "Word that Rhymes With Second Word"
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I'm not doing this to be a jerk, but it makes it sound like a kindergartner wrote it.
I mean, like this seemingly sentimental love bit:
I’m not rich, don’t even make enough to be poor,
But I’d rather fight for you than take a cheap, dirty whore,
I work through the day to be with you at night,
I fight through all the **** just to hold you tight,
Way too clunky, and awkward, to be taken seriously. The actual strength of the words is hurt by the fact they are strewn together in a sense to match the very one dimensional rhyming scheme. It's too wordy, and very unnatural. Especially when dealing with something as delicate as romance, that is BAD.
Trying focusing on what your song is about, and don't write lines out sparsely when the rhyming makes sense. Not every line has to rhyme with the last, not every block has to have exactly four lines, not every rhyme has to be done just once.
Switch it up a bit, focus on what your song actually is trying to say, and write it of that not just simplistic rhymes that come off your head, and bear no resemblance to each other just because you feel you have to completely follow a standard formula.
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