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Old 05-20-2010, 06:55 PM   #91 (permalink)
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Wow, you're good... that's pretty much what I was going for. I was just thinking earlier that the constant swearing was crippling my writing and that I need to slow down on it a bit. As far as the "Cry, cry, cry" part, I've been toying with the idea of keeping or trashing it.

Thanks Veg.
I have my moments!

I feel most of your songs have an ironic, humorous feel to them, which I enjoy. Also, you are rather daring with the way you write them. You don't hold back.

About "cry, cry, cry": in your song, this line reveals the sensitive side of the person speaking. Without it, the listener might not realize the person isn't just a complete asshole...if there were such a thing as people who are complete assholes.
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