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t3hplatyz0rz · 01-27-2010, 06:05 PM

I think that some parts seem extremely kids-book-ish cliche. I also think that you should focus more on the history of the singer. What goals are they trying to accomplish, which requires so much determination? Is it just loneliness?

01-27-2010, 06:05 PM	#2 (permalink)
t3hplatyz0rz Music Addict Join Date: Jan 2010 Location: In the moment Posts: 102	I think that some parts seem extremely kids-book-ish cliche. I also think that you should focus more on the history of the singer. What goals are they trying to accomplish, which requires so much determination? Is it just loneliness?