I like the last one. That's a really nice concept dude! Strange rhyme pattern but every genius raises an eyebrow or two!
The title seems a bit long to me, but then I can't think of a better one so I'll leave it!
What kind of music does this go to? That would help me paint abetter picture in my mind's ear...:-S
if you're in a generous mood please give mine a crit:
http://www.musicbanter.com/showthread.php?t=6958 but I don't mind if you can't be bothered
