Quote:
Originally Posted by Kickin'
As I sleep off the day’s scream’s,
I wonder how you always find your way back into my dreams,
It’s not ever what it seems.
A vivid picture painted into my head,
I think about the time with me in your bed,
Painfully reminded of all the tears you shed.
(****, you’ve got that grip on me)
Chorus---
As I sleep! I’ll dream of your being
And when I awake, it’ll have a whole new meaning
See if from your dream you can hear me screaming!
As I sleep! I’ll dream of your being
And when I awake, it’ll have a whole new meaning
See if from your dream you can hear me screaming!
This is what happens when your face is so unforgettable
This is how I do when all my actions are so regrettable
Imagining that I could have you back as mine again
Imagining everything that spills from my pen
If only I had told you what I really knew
If only I could have kept you.
As I sleep! I’ll dream of your being
And when I awake, it’ll have a whole new meaning
See if from your dream you can hear me screaming!
As I sleep! I’ll dream of your being
And when I awake, it’ll have a whole new meaning
See if from your dream you can hear me screaming!
What could I do to find my way back around to you?
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Clinched tightly are my fists
As your lips press against his
I can feel the blood rushing from my heart to my hands
How can I control myself now?
(There no controlling this)
Apart from all the things that I have done
Where did I go wrong?
Apart from all I did for you
You were never true
(Chorus)
As much as I’d like to give you another chance!
I wasn’t ever cut out for this two timing romance!
Because at the second glance, your nothing but a beautiful lie.
You’re nothing but a ****ing surprise!
I’ll sweat this one off, like it’s a sickness
Forgetting your presence, I really hate this
The unfaithful show you gave me might have ended your life
(Don’t be surprised if you wake up in hell)
It’s hot but it’s where you belong
You’ll die and it doesn’t feel wrong
As much as I’d like to give you another chance!
I wasn’t ever cut out for this two timing romance!
Because at the second glance, your nothing but a beautiful lie.
You’re nothing but a ****ing surprise!
Angels will sing! – “****ing great that she didn’t make it,
Heaven is only for the true,
Things don’t always fall in place
But she fell when she was unfaithful to you!”
It’s hot but it’s where you belong
You’ll die and it doesn’t feel wrong (X3)
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If you have any questions about the lyrics I will be glad to answer them. Any compliments, hateful words, or critique are always welcome too.
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I like the second song a lot better than the first one because it is a lot more clear what is going on. The violence of the man telling the story is apparent, the cause clear, the outcome mixed in obscurities and hard truths. Good job. The only part i dont so much like (in bold) is in the second stanza. It just isn't good english and it doesn't make sense. Re-work it and you've got a lot of potential...assuming the music fits it.
The first song just doesn't stand alone lyrically. There seems to be a lot of "filler" lines (in bold esp.) that take away from the power of the concept and confuse the meaning. It sounds a bit whiny and amatuer, one because its a common theme, and two because it is so repetive without real purpose. Take the time to sit down and focus one exactly what you are trying to say.