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Old 08-21-2009, 11:26 AM   #5 (permalink)
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I agree with trying to avoid the unnecessary pronouns and auxiliaries--try to make the listener sense movement in action, or other sense. Instead of the afore-discussed "it is" quandary, use an action verb like "spill" or "chew" or something along those lines. Make the listener TASTE or FEEL the song!
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